Incinermyn
The Abomination Lives!!!
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Table of Contents
Prologue: Remnants
Chapter One: Friends? (Revising)
Biohazard
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Rating: PG-10 (or just PG) for occasional mild language, brief scenes of violence, and dark themes.
Basis: Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Blue Rescue Team/Original Idea, Characters, and Plot
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Science Fiction, Cartoon Comedy, some Horror/Suspense and some Comedic Romance
Disclaimer, Author's Notes, and…some stuff about me
-I do not own Pokémon or Pokémon Mystery Dungeon. I've written this piece because I was bored and had an idea for a story that could take place in the PMD world.
-Some locations in the PMD world may (or may not) have been changed and some of my own have been added to better suit my plot, theme, and time setting.
-This piece contains fake Pokémon as well as other things of my own creation (it is fiction after all and they have some significance to my story).
-I wasn't satisfied with how the last version of this was turning out, so I decided to do some revising to make the chapters a little fuller. If you read the last version, you'll notice some serious changes to the few things I had, especially in the prologue and chapter two (I should give some credit to Hanako Tabris and Alter Ego, since they pointed out what should've been done better with their critiques on the last version, which really got me thinking about stuff).
-Finally, this really isn't the first thing that I've written for fun. I've been writing stuff for my own entertainment since my senior year in high school (specifically, since November 04) and some of my things were Pokemon fanfics, but, since I'm shy, I never worked up the courage to post them anywhere… This one was the first I decided to actually post and, even though I had it up before, but then had it closed so I could revise it, I'd again like to some constructive criticism on this.
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Prologue: Remnants
Canersia the Ascetic's Prophecy
Such arrogance unparalleled since the Age of Man.
The meteor should have brought us death,
But its destruction shall only bring changes.
In the ten years that follow its demolition, this world shall transmute,
Becoming inhospitable to the indigenous organisms,
Turning suitable for the savages that thrived in eras past.
But the worst this certainly is not…
A second threat shall emerge.
A monster that Man's sciences created.
A demon so deathly atrocious it was christened Biohazard.
And with it, life shall be razed in a way most heinous…
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It was dark within the ruins of a human facility. Consuming virtually every inch of every corridor inside the laboratory, the inky shadows were only dispelled somewhat by a moderate-sized flame's illumination. This flame was the only light for the three adventurers that dared to trek within the structure's confines, enough so that each of the group's members was visible.
In the front of the relatively tight-knit triad slowly ambling through the blackness that otherwise consumed the inky tunnel was Alakazam, the troupe's leader. Standing at a height of 4' 11", the humanoid's distinguishing characteristic was his massive light-brown cranium that was shaped roughly like five-pointed star. His narrow mouth extended away from the rectangular eyes and spiked cheekbones that formed his face. At the opposite end of his head was a pair of long cone-like ears that formed a 'V' atop his brow. Apparently supporting his oversized noggin, the creature's dark brown trunk consisted of an area with large shoulders but quickly gave way to a chest that thinned out into a meager-sized abdomen. Stemming from his shoulders were two light brown arms that were so scrawny that they probably wouldn't even be able to lift the spoons Alakazam carried the three-fingered hands at the ends of his dark brown forearms if not for the fact his telekinesis helped control his form. Out of his pelvic area, a pair of wiry legs that gave way to his hoof-shaped feet protruded.
Directly behind Alakazam, Charizard followed. At a height of 5' 7", the orange-red dragon's stature was considerably better built than his comrade in the lead. Not as heavily reliant on mystic powers as Alakazam, the beast's head was considerably smaller and supported by a strong neck that extended from his upper body. A pair of strong wings with blue undersides protruded from his torso's backside. At their bases, his arms extended away from his torso a little. With three-fingered hands that had pointed claws at their tips, he could easily grasp most types of flesh, if he needed to. His abdomen was rounded, almost egg-shaped, with a large area that had a yellow-orange coloration. A pair of sturdy legs also supported this part of his body. Dragging behind him, Charizard's long tail possessed the flame providing their light. Keeping his wings somewhat tucked near his shoulders, the beast tried to maximize the amount of light that the group had by reducing how much his body blocked.
Lingering a couple feet behind Charizard, Tyranitar took up the group's rear. With a build far better than that of his allies, the burly rock creature towered over the other two at a height of 6' 7". His face protruded only somewhat away from the smooth grayish-green frontal area of the stone armor covering his head, neck, and torso. Atop his virtually flat yet slanted crest, a threesome of spikes stuck up; two over the areas behind each of his eyes, the third jabbing higher than the others like a horn from the center of his skull. On the backside of the thick hide covering his strong neck and shoulders, two rows of long stalagmites emerged, symbols of his earthen nature. Several different portions of the beast's armored hide covered his strong arms so they were still free to bend as needed. A blue rhombus on the midsection where Tyranitar's torso gave way to his abdomen marked the division point in the upper and lower parts of his hard skin. Unlike his upper body, the stone being's abdomen had no protrusions other than the stout legs supporting his behemoth form. His tail in tow behind him was thick yet smooth until several spikes emerged near its cone-like tip.
The illustrious Team ACT had been sent to the remnants of a once thriving human city for the sole reason of investigating for anything that might be of interest, any type of relic or tool. So far, their expedition had turned up fruitless, having found nothing worth taking. Hopefully, the massive structure they were now in would house something worthwhile.
With limited visibility, though, their search was limited mostly to having Alakazam use his psychokinesis to sense for anything that might lie within the rooms off to the sides of the hall they traversed. But, even then, this didn't stop the other two from taking in the structure's 'historic' atmosphere.
The illumination of Charizard's tail flame reached to the walls several feet to each side of the group. Slowly shifting his head from left to right as the three of them passed, Tyranitar was just able to see the occasional holes in them that its glow revealed.
"I can't believe this place just sat like this for years without anyone check it out…" he uttered.
Hearing him but still moving forward without turning, Alakazam replied, "You do realize that this town was discovered just a few days ago, correct, Tyranitar? Regardless, no one else may come here until we're done."
"Yeah, I know. It's just too bad it wasn't found sooner. This was a seriously awesome find!" Tyranitar almost barked, his voice carrying somewhat down the hall.
"Indeed… This was quite an elaborate settlement the humans had. If only we could…" Alakazam uttered, before a loud creaking echoed throughout the compound.
Stopping in their tracks, the threesome tilted their heads upward, where there also seemed to be a banging sound. After a few moments, both reverberations went silent.
"This place isn't gonna collapse, is it?" Tyranitar then asked.
"Something up there?" Charizard inquired concurrently.
"No… It was just the building settling," Alakazam replied, returning his head to its former position. The other two did the same.
Charizard immediately commented, "You sure you didn't sense anything? Sounded like something was crawling through the vents to me."
"I am positive. There was nothing there. Let us continue," Alakazam responded as he started walking again. Releasing a sighing breath, Charizard followed his lead, as did Tyranitar.
As the group continued in silence, Charizard found that he couldn't help but focus his stare somewhat towards the yellowed tiles covering the floor. A layer of grime covered the surface and, with every step he took, it seemed to cake on the soles of his feet. Normally, it wouldn't have bothered him, but the grungy build-up felt as if it were moving on the surface of his skin.
Sneering his nose at the feeling it was giving him, the dragon inhaled a considerable amount of the stale air. In doing so, the slight scent of rotting eggs mixed in with the musty stench entered his nostrils.
Snorting, he uttered, "Do you guys smell that?"
Forcing his irises to the backmost parts of his eyes, Alakazam replied, "That was scent of sulfur you just whiffed… Perhaps some of the gas that was once used in the heating of chemicals still lingers within the gas lines in some classrooms."
Returning his stare forward, Alakazam suddenly stopped. Moving up to his sides, Charizard to his right; Tyranitar to his left, the others came to see why he halted.
Charizard's flame revealed a fork in the tunnel with a doorway marking its V-shaped divide. Emerging from the door and thickly coating a good portion of junction's beginning, there was a hideous-looking substance. Its surface bared alternating lime and black streaks of varying sizes.
"What…is that?" Tyranitar asked, turning his head to Alakazam with a disgusted expression on his face.
"It's some type of amoebic colony. I'll clear the paths with Psychic," the humanoid creature responded, eyes starting to glow a light blue.
The sludge shifted slightly, but retook its position almost immediately.
"What's wrong?" Tyranitar barked.
"It's forcing me to focus on only a few cells at a time. I can't move it," Alakazam replied, causing his eyes to return to normal.
Something a ways behind the threesome dropped onto the floor causing a thud against the tile. Hearing it, Charizard turned back and walked two steps away from the others.
"We've got company!" he barked, causing a pair of long purplish claws to appear at the ends of his fingers.
"Blood…" a faint voice replied.
Two rows of fangs shot forth from the shadows. In a vertical position, the large maw clamped onto Charizard's neck; biting hard with its serrated teeth, piercing his skin like knives. Securing its prey, the fiend yanked him away from the others.
"Charizard!" Tyranitar and Alakazam barked, whipping their bodies around.
Dropping Charizard onto his back, the creature immediately started to wrapped its slender body around the dragon. Winding its coils with an alternating series of lime and black rings running their length around Charizard's body, the organism constricted around his abdomen and tail tightly.
"Get off!" the dragon barked, trying to tear the snakelike beast's hide with his Shadow Claw. But, the monstrosity's elastic flesh caused its body to form to the attack, making it useless.
"GUY-YEEE!" his assailant shrilled as Alakazam used Psychic to gain control of it.
Forcing it to release its mouth's clamp and loosen its coils, he removed the monster from around Charizard's body and caused it to levitate in midair. As Charizard stood and moved by the others two, Alakazam then forced the fiend to contract its body into a form with a stubby head sticking away from an overall cone of a body. Doing this caused a row of red spines to rise from the creature's backside.
"Didn't you sense thing!" Charizard barked, feeling his neck where the beast bit him.
"Its physiology made it invisible to my powers before. I'm even using the bulk of them just to hold it!" Alakazam replied.
Tyranitar walked towards the creature before them and asked, "What is this thing?"
"A parasite…" Alakazam uttered, panting.
Rotating in midair so it faced away from them, the leech screamed, "GUY-YEEE! None shall attack the progeny!"
Something behind the group gave an earsplitting yelp. Before anyone could turn to it, each team member was stabbed in the back of his neck.
Afterwards, the parasite dropped to the floor. Within seconds, Alakazam flopped upon the surface face first, his spoons falling to his sides as he did. Then, Charizard did…followed by Tyranitar, who caused the entire building to shake somewhat upon landing.
Elongating its neck so its head loomed over Charizard, the leech bent its elliptic maw to reveal its red oval shaped eyes with slits in their centers and said, "Pity… You would have been my only meal."
Turning its face towards the others, it finished, "But now…"
Once it finished, it retracted its neck and slicked off back into the shadows from whence it came…
End Prologue
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Hope that was good enough… I'm working on Chapter One's revisions, but there's not a whole lot I want to do beyond touch up the narration and some parts of the dialogue. I can't say exactly when it'll be up, but it might be either later this week or, more likely, some time next week.
Anyways, feel free to critique, but, like I said before, try and keep it constructive…
Prologue: Remnants
Chapter One: Friends? (Revising)
Biohazard
______________________________________________________________________________
Rating: PG-10 (or just PG) for occasional mild language, brief scenes of violence, and dark themes.
Basis: Pokémon Mystery Dungeon: Blue Rescue Team/Original Idea, Characters, and Plot
Genres: Action/Adventure, Fantasy, Science Fiction, Cartoon Comedy, some Horror/Suspense and some Comedic Romance
Disclaimer, Author's Notes, and…some stuff about me
-I do not own Pokémon or Pokémon Mystery Dungeon. I've written this piece because I was bored and had an idea for a story that could take place in the PMD world.
-Some locations in the PMD world may (or may not) have been changed and some of my own have been added to better suit my plot, theme, and time setting.
-This piece contains fake Pokémon as well as other things of my own creation (it is fiction after all and they have some significance to my story).
-I wasn't satisfied with how the last version of this was turning out, so I decided to do some revising to make the chapters a little fuller. If you read the last version, you'll notice some serious changes to the few things I had, especially in the prologue and chapter two (I should give some credit to Hanako Tabris and Alter Ego, since they pointed out what should've been done better with their critiques on the last version, which really got me thinking about stuff).
-Finally, this really isn't the first thing that I've written for fun. I've been writing stuff for my own entertainment since my senior year in high school (specifically, since November 04) and some of my things were Pokemon fanfics, but, since I'm shy, I never worked up the courage to post them anywhere… This one was the first I decided to actually post and, even though I had it up before, but then had it closed so I could revise it, I'd again like to some constructive criticism on this.
______________________________________________________________________________
Prologue: Remnants
Canersia the Ascetic's Prophecy
Such arrogance unparalleled since the Age of Man.
The meteor should have brought us death,
But its destruction shall only bring changes.
In the ten years that follow its demolition, this world shall transmute,
Becoming inhospitable to the indigenous organisms,
Turning suitable for the savages that thrived in eras past.
But the worst this certainly is not…
A second threat shall emerge.
A monster that Man's sciences created.
A demon so deathly atrocious it was christened Biohazard.
And with it, life shall be razed in a way most heinous…
______________________________________________________________________________
It was dark within the ruins of a human facility. Consuming virtually every inch of every corridor inside the laboratory, the inky shadows were only dispelled somewhat by a moderate-sized flame's illumination. This flame was the only light for the three adventurers that dared to trek within the structure's confines, enough so that each of the group's members was visible.
In the front of the relatively tight-knit triad slowly ambling through the blackness that otherwise consumed the inky tunnel was Alakazam, the troupe's leader. Standing at a height of 4' 11", the humanoid's distinguishing characteristic was his massive light-brown cranium that was shaped roughly like five-pointed star. His narrow mouth extended away from the rectangular eyes and spiked cheekbones that formed his face. At the opposite end of his head was a pair of long cone-like ears that formed a 'V' atop his brow. Apparently supporting his oversized noggin, the creature's dark brown trunk consisted of an area with large shoulders but quickly gave way to a chest that thinned out into a meager-sized abdomen. Stemming from his shoulders were two light brown arms that were so scrawny that they probably wouldn't even be able to lift the spoons Alakazam carried the three-fingered hands at the ends of his dark brown forearms if not for the fact his telekinesis helped control his form. Out of his pelvic area, a pair of wiry legs that gave way to his hoof-shaped feet protruded.
Directly behind Alakazam, Charizard followed. At a height of 5' 7", the orange-red dragon's stature was considerably better built than his comrade in the lead. Not as heavily reliant on mystic powers as Alakazam, the beast's head was considerably smaller and supported by a strong neck that extended from his upper body. A pair of strong wings with blue undersides protruded from his torso's backside. At their bases, his arms extended away from his torso a little. With three-fingered hands that had pointed claws at their tips, he could easily grasp most types of flesh, if he needed to. His abdomen was rounded, almost egg-shaped, with a large area that had a yellow-orange coloration. A pair of sturdy legs also supported this part of his body. Dragging behind him, Charizard's long tail possessed the flame providing their light. Keeping his wings somewhat tucked near his shoulders, the beast tried to maximize the amount of light that the group had by reducing how much his body blocked.
Lingering a couple feet behind Charizard, Tyranitar took up the group's rear. With a build far better than that of his allies, the burly rock creature towered over the other two at a height of 6' 7". His face protruded only somewhat away from the smooth grayish-green frontal area of the stone armor covering his head, neck, and torso. Atop his virtually flat yet slanted crest, a threesome of spikes stuck up; two over the areas behind each of his eyes, the third jabbing higher than the others like a horn from the center of his skull. On the backside of the thick hide covering his strong neck and shoulders, two rows of long stalagmites emerged, symbols of his earthen nature. Several different portions of the beast's armored hide covered his strong arms so they were still free to bend as needed. A blue rhombus on the midsection where Tyranitar's torso gave way to his abdomen marked the division point in the upper and lower parts of his hard skin. Unlike his upper body, the stone being's abdomen had no protrusions other than the stout legs supporting his behemoth form. His tail in tow behind him was thick yet smooth until several spikes emerged near its cone-like tip.
The illustrious Team ACT had been sent to the remnants of a once thriving human city for the sole reason of investigating for anything that might be of interest, any type of relic or tool. So far, their expedition had turned up fruitless, having found nothing worth taking. Hopefully, the massive structure they were now in would house something worthwhile.
With limited visibility, though, their search was limited mostly to having Alakazam use his psychokinesis to sense for anything that might lie within the rooms off to the sides of the hall they traversed. But, even then, this didn't stop the other two from taking in the structure's 'historic' atmosphere.
The illumination of Charizard's tail flame reached to the walls several feet to each side of the group. Slowly shifting his head from left to right as the three of them passed, Tyranitar was just able to see the occasional holes in them that its glow revealed.
"I can't believe this place just sat like this for years without anyone check it out…" he uttered.
Hearing him but still moving forward without turning, Alakazam replied, "You do realize that this town was discovered just a few days ago, correct, Tyranitar? Regardless, no one else may come here until we're done."
"Yeah, I know. It's just too bad it wasn't found sooner. This was a seriously awesome find!" Tyranitar almost barked, his voice carrying somewhat down the hall.
"Indeed… This was quite an elaborate settlement the humans had. If only we could…" Alakazam uttered, before a loud creaking echoed throughout the compound.
Stopping in their tracks, the threesome tilted their heads upward, where there also seemed to be a banging sound. After a few moments, both reverberations went silent.
"This place isn't gonna collapse, is it?" Tyranitar then asked.
"Something up there?" Charizard inquired concurrently.
"No… It was just the building settling," Alakazam replied, returning his head to its former position. The other two did the same.
Charizard immediately commented, "You sure you didn't sense anything? Sounded like something was crawling through the vents to me."
"I am positive. There was nothing there. Let us continue," Alakazam responded as he started walking again. Releasing a sighing breath, Charizard followed his lead, as did Tyranitar.
As the group continued in silence, Charizard found that he couldn't help but focus his stare somewhat towards the yellowed tiles covering the floor. A layer of grime covered the surface and, with every step he took, it seemed to cake on the soles of his feet. Normally, it wouldn't have bothered him, but the grungy build-up felt as if it were moving on the surface of his skin.
Sneering his nose at the feeling it was giving him, the dragon inhaled a considerable amount of the stale air. In doing so, the slight scent of rotting eggs mixed in with the musty stench entered his nostrils.
Snorting, he uttered, "Do you guys smell that?"
Forcing his irises to the backmost parts of his eyes, Alakazam replied, "That was scent of sulfur you just whiffed… Perhaps some of the gas that was once used in the heating of chemicals still lingers within the gas lines in some classrooms."
Returning his stare forward, Alakazam suddenly stopped. Moving up to his sides, Charizard to his right; Tyranitar to his left, the others came to see why he halted.
Charizard's flame revealed a fork in the tunnel with a doorway marking its V-shaped divide. Emerging from the door and thickly coating a good portion of junction's beginning, there was a hideous-looking substance. Its surface bared alternating lime and black streaks of varying sizes.
"What…is that?" Tyranitar asked, turning his head to Alakazam with a disgusted expression on his face.
"It's some type of amoebic colony. I'll clear the paths with Psychic," the humanoid creature responded, eyes starting to glow a light blue.
The sludge shifted slightly, but retook its position almost immediately.
"What's wrong?" Tyranitar barked.
"It's forcing me to focus on only a few cells at a time. I can't move it," Alakazam replied, causing his eyes to return to normal.
Something a ways behind the threesome dropped onto the floor causing a thud against the tile. Hearing it, Charizard turned back and walked two steps away from the others.
"We've got company!" he barked, causing a pair of long purplish claws to appear at the ends of his fingers.
"Blood…" a faint voice replied.
Two rows of fangs shot forth from the shadows. In a vertical position, the large maw clamped onto Charizard's neck; biting hard with its serrated teeth, piercing his skin like knives. Securing its prey, the fiend yanked him away from the others.
"Charizard!" Tyranitar and Alakazam barked, whipping their bodies around.
Dropping Charizard onto his back, the creature immediately started to wrapped its slender body around the dragon. Winding its coils with an alternating series of lime and black rings running their length around Charizard's body, the organism constricted around his abdomen and tail tightly.
"Get off!" the dragon barked, trying to tear the snakelike beast's hide with his Shadow Claw. But, the monstrosity's elastic flesh caused its body to form to the attack, making it useless.
"GUY-YEEE!" his assailant shrilled as Alakazam used Psychic to gain control of it.
Forcing it to release its mouth's clamp and loosen its coils, he removed the monster from around Charizard's body and caused it to levitate in midair. As Charizard stood and moved by the others two, Alakazam then forced the fiend to contract its body into a form with a stubby head sticking away from an overall cone of a body. Doing this caused a row of red spines to rise from the creature's backside.
"Didn't you sense thing!" Charizard barked, feeling his neck where the beast bit him.
"Its physiology made it invisible to my powers before. I'm even using the bulk of them just to hold it!" Alakazam replied.
Tyranitar walked towards the creature before them and asked, "What is this thing?"
"A parasite…" Alakazam uttered, panting.
Rotating in midair so it faced away from them, the leech screamed, "GUY-YEEE! None shall attack the progeny!"
Something behind the group gave an earsplitting yelp. Before anyone could turn to it, each team member was stabbed in the back of his neck.
Afterwards, the parasite dropped to the floor. Within seconds, Alakazam flopped upon the surface face first, his spoons falling to his sides as he did. Then, Charizard did…followed by Tyranitar, who caused the entire building to shake somewhat upon landing.
Elongating its neck so its head loomed over Charizard, the leech bent its elliptic maw to reveal its red oval shaped eyes with slits in their centers and said, "Pity… You would have been my only meal."
Turning its face towards the others, it finished, "But now…"
Once it finished, it retracted its neck and slicked off back into the shadows from whence it came…
End Prologue
______________________________________________________________________________
Hope that was good enough… I'm working on Chapter One's revisions, but there's not a whole lot I want to do beyond touch up the narration and some parts of the dialogue. I can't say exactly when it'll be up, but it might be either later this week or, more likely, some time next week.
Anyways, feel free to critique, but, like I said before, try and keep it constructive…
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