Thanks for the critique! I will say that my mic setup is kind of spotty right now and that could be it, but I definitely think voice lessons would be good for me. The thing is, I prefer not to sing because I don't think I have enough on the higher end to sing as powerfully as I'd like.
All of that said, what did you think of the song itself? I take a little more pride in my songwriting than my performance. Also keep in mind I would like to get a full band behind this one at some point as well.
Well, voice lessons help expanding your reach too. Once you get good enough control, you can reach notes you couldn't reach before.
With the song, I'd say the verses are good, the lyrics are a little simple. And with that I don't mean they're bad, because they're not. They're really decent, they get the point across, but they are a bit plain. There's no real poetry behind them. I guess I have to explain that too, because I may not make myself that clear, haha. Even though the lyrics have some metaphors, they are a bit cliche and basic. They work well for what you're trying to tell in the song, but they are bit simple. I know this, because it's a critique I myself got a lot too, haha. When it comes to the guitar, it gets a bit repetive I find. It is mainly because of personal liking, as I like song with a lot of changes in tempo and power. The chords don't differentiate between chorus and verse that much. I find that this is easily helped by adding riffs or backing instruments, but as this is more of a singer-songwriter approach I'd say use some difference in volume or tempo, as at the moment the song just goes on, and there is no tension. It lacks build-up, which isn't a must of course, but when a song is almost 5 minutes, it does need it. This can easily be done by adding some power to your vocals in the chorus. I'd also just remove the ending. It doesn't really add to the song that much, and the lyrics lay on your inspirations a bit thick. If you keep in mind the message of the song in mind " trying to erase something negative in your life", then the lyric "I will destroy every piece of your soul" is a bit extreme. Most of the lyrics fit both the hp theme, and the getting over something theme, but that lyric doesn't. It suggest a lot of aggressive manners against the wrong do-ers, which is a bit extreme, haha. Most of this is really from personal liking, so if you think something I said isn't true, then it isn't, haha. I hope this helps!