Kingdom Hearts: The Somebody

[.Tactic.]

Welcome to My Sprite Comic!
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You'll be happy to know that Pokemon Just Pants will not be finishing, because .. well. It was crappy.. But This is My New Comic!
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Don't Know The KH Storyline?
~Click Here to View It~
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~The Story~

Spoiler:

When Sora Was Awakened in Kingdom Hearts 2, Roxas' heart was created! But His body dissapeared, his new found heart and mind joined forces, granting Roxas a soul. Roxas' soul was stored by the Organisation, and Axel protected Roxas until the time would be right for his birth as a somebody. Roxas began feeding off Sora's mind, taking his power.. and memories..

Soon Roxas Will awaken and destroy Sora with the very memories that had belonged to both of them. Then Roxas will be the Somebody and Sora will be the Nobody..

Axel Plans to awaken Roxas and then Absorb Xion from Sora so that the three freinds can reunite as one against DiZ!

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I am Always looking for Co-Authours so please apply!
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~The Comics~
If there is a Line through the middle, that means it is coming next...
- Episode 1 - Visions
- Episode 2 - The Gummi Ship Crisis
- Episode 3 - Xion
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Please View And Comment - Thank you.

 

[Deja Vu]

Finally! A KH comic!

I like how you manipulated different games to fit your storyline.

 

[[NovaPirate]]

Wow. I'm confused. I really don't know what's happening, and that's a problem.
For somebody who /hasn't/ played any KH games (that's me!), this makes /no/ sense. And that discourages readers. So you really need to explain what's going on, using some kind of exposition-like comic.

Just a small note, but try to keep text away from the walls of speech bubbles, and instead of resizing font to fit the bubble, resize the bubble to fit the text. Small text = had to read.
The game screen shots are okay, but low quality and more confusion negates any effect. And grammar and spelling are your friends, so make sure to keep them happy. Spell check your comics before submitting them.

And what's with those bubbles at the bottom? I'm trying to find out if those are summaries of the previous comic or what happens between comics.

Please try to fix these, and I'll review again afterward.

 

[Logiedan]

Agreed with NovaPirate on the spellchecking. Though everyone makes mistakes,it's always nice to read correct spelling. I also love how you added some pictures of the 3D animation of KH. I'd like to see that more in the future. Good luck.

 

[.Tactic.]

Finally! A KH comic!

I like how you manipulated different games to fit your storyline.

Thanks man

Wow. I'm confused. I really don't know what's happening, and that's a problem.
For somebody who /hasn't/ played any KH games (that's me!), this makes /no/ sense. And that discourages readers. So you really need to explain what's going on, using some kind of exposition-like comic.
I consider brushing up on well.. kingdom hearts, even the orgininal games were very confusing and mysterious, but it comes clear at the end..
Just a small note, but try to keep text away from the walls of speech bubbles, and instead of resizing font to fit the bubble, resize the bubble to fit the text. Small text = had to read.
The game screen shots are okay, but low quality and more confusion negates any effect. And grammar and spelling are your friends, so make sure to keep them happy. Spell check your comics before submitting them.
Ok thanks
And what's with those bubbles at the bottom? I'm trying to find out if those are summaries of the previous comic or what happens between comics.
They are summaries yes, but of that comic not the previous one..
Please try to fix these, and I'll review again afterward.

Ok/

Agreed with NovaPirate on the spellchecking. Though everyone makes mistakes,it's always nice to read correct spelling. I also love how you added some pictures of the 3D animation of KH. I'd like to see that more in the future. Good luck.

Ok, I hope you read on..
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New Episode Released
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Xion

 

[Spherical Ice]

Beside what Nova Pirate said.

What is a nobody? And what's a somebody?

The way you've used them, you're acting as if they're normal words - if so, then the context is waaay off - if not, then shouldn't you capitilize it?

I am confused. [/neverplayedKH]

 

[.Tactic.]

I've added this to the first post.
"Don't Know The KH Storyline?
~Click Here to View It~"

It is the entire KH Story so far..

 

[[NovaPirate]]

Honestly, that should not be necessary.
You don't need to have played every Pokémon game to know what's going on in a Pokémon based sprite comic.
But, however, it's acceptable for now.