FireRed hack: Pokèmon "Shadow of Darkness"

[Flaming_Printer]

Your storyline is very hard to read and full of grammatical errors...
I quickly fixed as much as i could for you.

Spoiler:

There are many different kinds Pokémon, that have different powers and types. Each of these Pokémon have their own ways of living. There are some powerful Pokémon, called legendary Pokémon. They are the protectors of Pokémon and people.

People and Pokémon live together. Some people catch Pokémon, and train them for battle. Others breed Pokémon, and raise them. Others even use their pokemon to do hard work. However, humans and Pokémon support each other every step of the way.
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However, there is also a dark side of human nature. Some people use their Pokémon to do evil deeds. Team Galactic, for example, are some of these people. They want to catch legendary Pokémon, and use them to rule the world.
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So, Team Galactic is hunting Giratina, because of its power to go into another dimension. If they can catch Giratina, they can get to the time and space dimension and can catch Dialga and Palkia (Note: Giratina can not take them to the Distortion World or the Reverse World). However, they have found out that Darkrai has the power to open a portal to the Distortion World. They have tried many times to catch Darkrai, but they always fail.
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So they came up with a new plan. They captured Mewtwo, and controlled him with a device. Then they made Mewtwo open the portal to the Distortion World. Darkrai immediately noticed that something was wrong but he did not have enough power to stop the evil Team Galactic.
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Darkrai shows you a dream:
You find your self in a dark place, and there is a white fog and some kind of light. When you take a step you feel a weak Earthquake and a huge Pokémon will fly away.
After that you will find yourself back in your bed.
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You live in the beautiful region of Deiona. Today is your 14th birthday, and you get out of bed. This is the day you will receive your first Pokémon, and when you talk to your Mother she will tell you that Professor Rowan, who is your Father's friend, has come here to research Pokémon. When you go outside you meet Professor Rowan, and he will give you a Pokémon as a gift as well as a Pokédex. He will then ask you to help him with his research on legendary Pokémon. After you leave the lab your Mother will give you a pair of running shoes and tell you to collect gym badges to become a Pokémon master. After that you will leave the town and go out on an adventure with your Pokemon. On your journey you will meet many trainers, lots of Pokémon, and battle bad guys.

I edited the edit of your story to make it a little more pleasing to read.(see the spoiler in the quote)

I left it basically the same with many edits. That is a very interesting storyline, and I can't wait to see how it all works out.

 

[Godlytion]

I like the sprite of Girantina :)
Nice work! Good luck, Darkerm!
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[valkyrion]

looks nice hope you work well

 

[Darkerm]

I edited the edit of your story to make it a little more pleasing to read.(see the spoiler in the quote)

I left it basically the same with many edits. That is a very interesting storyline, and I can't wait to see how it all works out.

Thanks for editing the story.

 

[Lord Varion]

You should have bgiratina
face you since every other pokemon does

 

[Darkerm]

Update.

time for a review i guess.

story/scripting
the story is amazing, and i really like it. as for scripting, you haven't really showed us much yet.

mapping
your mapping is good, but your maps are really big, which gives you more room, sometimes too much, making the maps quite empty.

graphics
the titlescreen is good except for the squares in the bottom left, but i see that happen in a few other good hacks.
as for the giratina, it's facing the wrong way, and has a really stone sort of pallette.

6/10

I fixed the Giratina Sprite. A new style Headbutt tree script added. You can pick up Berry from the Headbutt tree bx using headbutt on it. Also I have post new gym leaders sprite. Thanks to "Awanshazwan" for making them for my hack.

 

[Lord Varion]

Nice gym leader sprites
but will they fit in they need do be 64x64

They dont loook it

 

[Darkerm]

Nice gym leader sprites
but will they fit in they need do be 64x64

They dont loook it

the orginal sprites are 64x64. I just make them a little bit bigger with photoshop. Thankx

 

[Lord Varion]

Coooool
Thsi hacks looks awesome anyway~
If you need any help mappin gimme a call

 

[altariaking]

ok, the giratina is facing the right way, except you just flipped it round so now the shading is off.
you should ask whoever made it to fix the shading.
other than that, looks good.

 

[Darkerm]

ok, the giratina is facing the right way, except you just flipped it round so now the shading is off.
you should ask whoever made it to fix the shading.
other than that, looks good.

I really like this Giratina Sprite. I don't know why you don't like it. So It will stay how it is now. Sorry

 

[Darkerm]

Coooool
Thsi hacks looks awesome anyway~
If you need any help mappin gimme a call

ok, when I need help I will let you know. Thankx dude.

 

[Darkerm]

I have inserted zoroa and zoroark backsprite. Also I make a spical dex for sprites. Hope everyone like it.
Spical Dex

 

[altariaking]

I really like this Giratina Sprite. I don't know why you don't like it. So It will stay how it is now. Sorry

i do like it.
i love it.
but look at the shading on the bottom, and the top, you'll see that the shading is mixed up because you just flipped it.
all you have to do is ask whoever made it to fix the shading, then it will be perfect.

anyway, nice updates, hope to see more soon

 

[Darkerm]

i do like it.
i love it.
but look at the shading on the bottom, and the top, you'll see that the shading is mixed up because you just flipped it.
all you have to do is ask whoever made it to fix the shading, then it will be perfect.

anyway, nice updates, hope to see more soon

Ok I will do that but who make the Giratina is busy. So, I have to wait. Btw, he alos make Darkrai for me. Thanks

 

[Darkerm]

Update

I have added a new Hero sprite. Thanks to "Cynder The Bloody Angel" for the sprite. Also I insert "New Uklele pichu" from the new game Pokemon Ranger Track of Light. Thanks to "HackMew" for the Sprite. I also Update Special Dex with new sprite. Two new triner added. Thanks to "Awanshazwan"{my Spriter} for the sprite. The story also got update. Hope everyone like it. Btw, if anyone wana help me with my hack just vm me{any kind of help}. Can someone make me few userbar\banner for me?

 

[MechaSonic99]

How Do i download this it looks pretty fun

 

[Darkerm]

How Do i download this it looks pretty fun

you can't download it now cuz it isn't release yet.
Btw, I am working on it. Hope to release a beta soon.

 

[mustafa505]

Nice Hack keep it up jsut a little bit on mapping...

 

[Cynder The Bloody Angel]

cool maps ^_^ they look pretty awesome