Dawn
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@TornZero: Actually, a gun would most likely be enough to take down most pokespirit wielders. If they were useless I wouldn't care about people having them. >=P Lastly, guns don't exist in pokemon. It's for the better that they don't too, because boy are they lame when you consider that they one up the whole point of having a pokespirit, being stronger than any normal human can hope to be.
On the other hand I actually don't care if a character owns a sword. You'd be lucky to scratch a pokespirit wielder with one let alone cut fatally by a sword, and most pokespirit wielders should be able to break one being used defensively in a single attack. However, it is completely inappropriate for a pokespirit wielder to gain a sword upon fusion, as pokemon do not use swords so one is left asking how that happened. xD
Regardless, I'm going to take this SU myself now.
@ZeroDarkness: Alright... It looks like spellcheck is not detecting these errors, even mine, so I'm going to go ahead and point them out. "isn't neither" is a double negative. Remember that double negatives result in a positive. "isn't neither" results in "is both". You've got several run on sentences going here. You failed to show possession by ammending 's onto Lan in reference to Lan's death. You used don't instead of doesn't in reference to Ichigo not remembering his parents...
Holy moly. I'm not normally a stickler about grammar and the like but... there's really a lot of them. I don't know what to say, buddy. What's going on? That's the first and only immediate problem I'm seeing.
On the other hand I actually don't care if a character owns a sword. You'd be lucky to scratch a pokespirit wielder with one let alone cut fatally by a sword, and most pokespirit wielders should be able to break one being used defensively in a single attack. However, it is completely inappropriate for a pokespirit wielder to gain a sword upon fusion, as pokemon do not use swords so one is left asking how that happened. xD
Regardless, I'm going to take this SU myself now.
@ZeroDarkness: Alright... It looks like spellcheck is not detecting these errors, even mine, so I'm going to go ahead and point them out. "isn't neither" is a double negative. Remember that double negatives result in a positive. "isn't neither" results in "is both". You've got several run on sentences going here. You failed to show possession by ammending 's onto Lan in reference to Lan's death. You used don't instead of doesn't in reference to Ichigo not remembering his parents...
Holy moly. I'm not normally a stickler about grammar and the like but... there's really a lot of them. I don't know what to say, buddy. What's going on? That's the first and only immediate problem I'm seeing.