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Pokemon Elite

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    Third Fan Fiction From Other Two Are STill On Chapter 1 And Both Of TheM Are Getting Crap Responses Ehe... So I Just Made This Thinking Of The Mew And MewTo..,Enjoy First Chapter
    Pg 13+

    Chapter 1
    Introduction..



    The planet Poké.Clam. Peaceful. Serene. At least, it was. Before the dark
    times.

    Before......Mewtwo.

    The story begins several years ago,when the planet was a glistering paradise.The pokémon,the only inhabitants of the planet,were more evolved than the pokémon that were on the planet Earth.Since there were no humans to try and capture them on the planet,the pokémon made a society,going so intellegent that they created an almost human civilization.However,there was a problem.The king of the planet,a mew,was becoming old,and didn't expect to live much longer.Since he never married,he had no children,thus,he had no heir to the throne.So,he went to his witch,a Jynx,for help.
    The Jynx had created a new device-a cloning machine.It would create a perfect replica of the pokémon being cloned.There were two tubes-one that the normal pokémon got into,and another tube that the clone took shape and emerged from.The downside was that the normal pokémon wouldn't survive the cloning-so much data has to be taken for a full clone,that the normal pokémon has no bones,no organs,no nothing.The normal pokémon would turn into a pile of gloop.
    The king mew didn't care for such a thing,however-he wasn't going to live much longer anyhow.He had the jynx set it up so that it would make a younger(try 30 years old)clone of himself.The king got in,and closed his eyes.The Jynx activated the machine.On cue,a beam of white energy shot down from the tube the king was in and engulfed him in it,sapping up the energy.It took the life force from the king and send it to the other tube,where a new pokémon began to take shape.Seconds later,the king was a pile of gloop,and the tube with the clone slid open,allowing it to step it.
    The Jynx gasped in horror.The clone didn't look a thing like the former king at all.Instead,it looked totally different-a totally different pokémon(take a wild guess!).The clone looked at the Jynx.A wicked smile appeared across it's face.Suddenly,it's eyes lit up a deep blue.The Jynx was surronded by a bright blue hue.Suddenly,the Jynx was flown into the tube where the former king had stood.The tube slid down.The clone pressed a few buttons,setting the machine to make a clone of the exact age as the Jynx.Seconds later,the original Jynx was no more.The clone,for some reason totally black with red stripes on it,stepped out.The clone of the knig smiled.
    The king's clone began to lure other pokémon into the cloning machine,and ordered the Jynx clone to make other cloning machines.Soon,the king's clone had a formidable army of clones.Finally,the king's clone ordered to attack the planet.However,there was one thing standing in the clone's way-mews.At the time,25% of the planet's population were mews.Using their psychic powers,they easily wiped out the the clone of the former king's army.However,when they tried to attack the head clone,they found it was too powerful.Soon,all but two mews were dead.
    The last two mews-a father mew and his 5-year old daughter,were thrown into a small prison with other normal pokémon prisoners.Several clones set up a cloning machine,and began to clone the prisoners.When they got to the father mew,however,he did something incredible-when he was put into the normal pokémon tube,he performed Psychic,causing the machine to start to blow and creating an escape route for his daughter and the other prisoners.The cloning machine blew up,destroying the facilty and all the clones in it.However,there was a price-the father mew didn't survive.His anguished daughter swore vengence against the clone of the former king,not realizing that she would become a huge deciding factor in the fate of the planet.
    The clone of the former king,now known has Mewtwo,replaced the area where the pokémon had originally lived with a dark,metal city-Mewtwotropolis.Ruling from his citadel in the exact center of the city,Mewtwo used his dark psychic powers to cast a spell over the planet,blocking out the sun over most places,destroying all the remains of what once a wonderful paradise,and withered 57% of the trees.He polluted the oceans,and put the planet into turmoil.What Mewtwo didn't realize,however,is that his reign of tyranny over the planet Poké would not go undaunted.Thus igniting the greatest battle in the history of Pokémon ever.No humans.No rules.A battle for survival.
    Chapter 2 Coming Soon...
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  • 42
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    Thanks.. I'll Do Better In Second Chapter...,
    Hey Guys Please Comment.., No One For Ranting Or Critiquing???
     
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  • 42
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    Well It Seems No One's Commenting
    *Sigh Another Flop
    Well Doesn't Matter I Am Writing The Second Chapter Injoy [:D][/U]

    Chapter 2
    Pok'E Rescuers???

    With Half The World Destroyed Everything Was In A Shattered State..,>>>
    *Mewtwo Had EnSlaved Many Pokemons...
    *With Half The Population No More...,Half Of Them Were Prisoners Of Mewtwo>>>

    Mewtwo Had Build Up A Huge Army....,Only After 5 Days Of His Rule His Army Was Getting Booted Of By Some Other Pokemons WHo Were Neither His Prisoners And Were Giving Him A Tough Time.

    They Broke Prisons And Helped Other Pokemons...,So That Pokemons Imprisoned Could Escape.

    They Were Came To Be Known As The Pok'e Rescuers In Short They Were Freedom Fighters.

    Mewtwo's Army Incharge Electabuzz Had Failed Him The 5th Time..
    And HE wAS cAlled On The Red Carpet EveryOne Knew Whenever Some Pokemon Failed Mewtwo The Particular Pokemon Would Be The Last Pokemon To See Him That Moment..,

    Currently>>>At The Place Of Mewtwo's Judge Ment<<<<
    The King (Mewtwo) Sat On His Throne With His Hand Over His Face..,
    Electabuzz Was Standing In Front Of Him.., The Other Pokemons Who Worked For Him Also Stood There..,
    A Scyther Over There Whispered To Another Of His Kind That
    ''What D'Ya What Punishment Will He Get??''
    The Other One Replied'
    Maybe Hang Him Up On The Ceiling..
    Or Maybe Give A Hyper BEam.... Which Will Mean That We'll Have To Clean And Groom Up The Walls And Decoration Again...,aRen't We Supposed To Be Army Pokemons How Can He Make Him Wash His Ass And Tail All The Time??
    ''Keep Your Mouth Shut Or Else He'll Give You 10 Hands And 6 Legs And ...Um.. The Way He Gave His Mentroylis To The Pokemon The Other Day//
    You Mean YesterDay ..
    Yes.
    What Is Mentroylis By The Way??
    Don'T Know Just Came Up On My Mouth..

    Suddenly MewTwo Screamed!

    KeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeepppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppppQqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqqquiuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiittttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttttteeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee

    You Both Are Disturbing The Chapter The Mod Will CLose The Thread!!!

    Ehe To Get Back On The Chapter Now...
    Electabuzz Said Mewtwo Please Forgive Me I'll Brush Your Teeth I'll I'll I'll
    Keep Quite '<Mewtwo sCReamed>>
    You Have Failed Me Uh You Have UM.. Failed ME THe .....
    The 5th Time Said''Chatot His Minister''
    Yes I Was Just Counting Till There...
    This Is Not Done Said Mewtwo Those Pok'e Rescuers Have Yet Succeeded And They Must Be Laughing On Me... So You Surely Deserve A Punishment
    He STood Up
    <He Stood Up This Surely Means His Legs Must Be Itching>
    I'll Not Kill You Easily Purrr...

    Mewtwo First Gave A Wild Grin And Then His Eyes Turned Blue All Of A Sudden ..,

    All Pokemons Gazed At Him As The Whole Room Turned Gay Blue..

    Suddenly Electabuzz Noticed His Hands Becoming Smaller His Head Becoming Small Too..
    It Wasn't Soon Till He Realized That He Was De-Evolving.
    He Turned Into A Elekid And Soon Into A Egg!!

    Mewtwo Picked The Egg Up And Smashed It..
    Then He Asked The Pokemons Standing There "Who Wants A Egg"???
    No one Raised Their Hands..
    So He Decided To Eat Himself..,

    Suddelny His Informer Dukskull Came In He Shouted
    King!! The Pok'e Rescuers Have Yet Pulled Up Another Act!!
    Rigth Now They Are In Sector 23 Trying To Take Off With The PokeBlocks..,

    Mewtwo Ordered "Send The Bug Team And ANd The Kojo Team Right Now Dispatch Them I Said!!

    Grr ThOse PokePals Even The Pokemon Prisoners Are Acting Up Bravely Because Of Them!! Those 5 Crooks I Mean Yeah Those Crooks!!

    Yes King!! "Said The Dukskull"

    Mewtwo Asked His Tech-O Specialist Drapion

    "Are The Radar System Ready??

    Yes King " Said Drapion"

    Yes Now I'll Soon Have The AutoGranites!!

    <On The Sector 23>
    What Happens At Sector 23 And With The Poke Rescuers???
    (You Must Be Giving Me Way Bad Words Thinking Who This Poke Rescuers Are.. Just Wait For The Chapter 3''
    Comment Guys!!
     
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  • 42
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    Is No One There For Commenting I Know I Am gEtting Impatient But..., It's No Point If I keep Posting Chapters Without No Audience To Comment It..,
    sigh* There's No One Even For Ranting.
     

    Myoko-chan

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    I know how you want this to be a comedy kind of thing, but theres lots of proper writing things wrong.

    Like punctuation.
    "This Is Not Done" Said Mewtwo, Those Pok'e Rescuers Have Yet Succeeded,...


    Grammar
    and They Must Be Laughing At Me

    Spelling
    Keep Quiet


    Chap 1 was good, but Chapter 2 was completely messed up, and I can easily tell you didn't even put effort in it.
     
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    Kewl* Nice Ranting..,
    Thanks For Pointing My Mistakes And Sorry Mod*
    ONe Qusetion Mod* If I Don't Get Responses Will My Thread Get Closed???
     
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