Pokemon Neron

[Umbreon's Shadow]

A rather old comic by me,with currently only one strip.Expect more soon though.

Story-Basicaly,the normal wannabe champion trainer.However what happens if there are some twists?Like some stupid girl commonly known as your rival falling in love with you and getting captured by some weird gang and some rather sad revelations,like "All your pokemon are belong to us!" or "I prefer to think of it as a tribute".

Issue 1: https://img.photobucket.com/albums/v687/Death2004/pokemoncomic1.png

 

[jc_rcw]

Its kind of plain, you might want to add more stuff.

 

[Umbreon's Shadow]

I figured.Should have added more stuff to it.Thanks for the comment!

 

[Karasuma]

Lol its good. at least its got text bubbles so the others wont tell you to put some. The OV sprite is kewl and the story seems great. Will he battle gym leaders?

 

[jc_rcw]

Its my pleasure ^^, it only has a guy and a house

 

[blueguy]

Absolutely dreadful. D-R-E-A-D-F-U-L. Your grammar is atrocious, the map is sparse and barren, and your recolor of the hero is pitiful. Plus the story is meaningless.

 

[Umbreon's Shadow]

Actually,the sprite is not a recolor.Its an edit of Brendan.I did figure there would be the other errors.Oh,the stupidity of the comic!XD
But thanks for the comments though!Gotta get much better.