Excellent job! I just found some errors and mistakes that I'd like to point out. :)
Aaron awoke to the sound of his alarm clock. It buzzed with annoying frequency until he slammed the top of it with his right hand. Silence upheld in the room until Aaron's mom shouted from downstairs.
I like that description =DDDDD Excellente!!
"No your not. Not yet anyways."
Your needs to be changed to you're.
. But he didn't dawdle on the idea, and pushed himself forward knowing he received his first partner soon.
Instead of
received, it should be
would receive since he hasn't necessarily received his first Pokemon yet, but he's about to.
Aaron pushed opened the double doors to the famous Oak Labratory and walked inside.
It should be
Laboratory instead of
Labratory.
A few assistants wondered here and there, cramming books into the many bookshelves that lined the walls.
I believe you meant
wandered since they're roaming around the room and cramming books.
"I see you have no pokemon yet, Aaron. Plodding behind me as usual, I guess. Your pokemon will probably be weak anyways." Jerry smirked at his last remark. "Well, I'll smell ya' later. Don't wanna be behind because I'm hangin' with some loser! Ha! Well, see ya' Aaron!"
He oddly reminds me of the game enemy...Huh...He even has the same catchphrase...
Well, suggestion-wise, I think the antagonists/enemies/rivals in the Pokemon series are
extremely similar, and I must recommend changing him to something else. Must all rivals be arrogant? Bleh xP Sorry. That was just my mini-rant/complaint. Forgive me. This story is sounding similar to the game.
"So, are you ready for your pokemon, Aaron? Or are you just going to stand their looking kind of goony?"
Pssh. Well then :P Oak, you have quite the vocabulary.
Goony. Haha xD I prefer the word
goober. It's fun to say :3
He handed them to Aaron. "That's a high-tech encyclopedia. It has data on most of the pokemon out their."
That is incorrect usage of the word
their. It should be
there.
Pushing in it's release button, a beautiful white light sprayed out of the ball, quickly forming into a red, puppy type pokemon.
It's should be
its.
I don't mean to be a bother when saying this, but I thought Poke Balls shot out a red light instead of a white one. Just a little something to think about...And puppy type? I think you should describe its features. That way there would be more clarification. I would appreciate it better if you described its ears, its fur, etc. Sorry if I'm being so demanding or something Dx
He looked at Professor Oak in question.
This is just a suggestion, but maybe instead of
in question, it could be changed to
questionably. It would make more sense =DDDDD
The machine responded by saying "Growlithe" and then giving a description of it.
I wonder what the description was o.o You don't have to, but I must suggest putting the description in the story. It'd be for better clarification.
"So your Growlithe, huh?"
Should be
you're.
Growlithe responded by climbing on to Aaron's arm and snuggling up against his stomach.
That must've been a light Growlithe. Dang! I wish my dog would climb up onto my arm >.> I would recommend putting something else, like snuggling against his leg or something. Just a suggestion.
Anyway, I liked some of the description you put in there, but I wanna know what Aaron's feeling, seeing, smelling, etc. It'd be nice to read about =DDDDD That way we could paint a picture in our heads. You've got a good story coming along, but please don't make it just like the game. Put some more originality into it. Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading more! You are very talented! =DDDDDD