Alrighty .. Uhm, not really liking this so much. I obviously see where the focal point is suppose to be, but it could defintely be made to 'stand out' a little more, y'know? Maybe if you remove whatever that is in the background, or at least apply a little blur to it. That way, the render would be getting even more... er, 'attention'? (for lack of a better term)
The text isn't that great either. It really sticks out, and again, takes away from the focal of the banner. Try maybe
not having it overlap the render, and also maybe make it a solid color or something. Y'know, still visible, just not as attention-drawing.
Lacking depth, needs more of a focal, and it's a little
too washed out on the left side. I know you need some type of light source, but try spreading it out a little bit if you insist on having it so bright. Make it seem more .. realistic.
I dunno, like ..
3/10?
This is a little better .. actually quite a bit better. There's still a few things I'm going to rub your face in, though. :)
First and foremost, wth are you doing with the text. REMOVE REMOVE REMOVE that solid drop shadow or whatever the hell that is under it. It makes it stand out
way to much, which again, isn't really helpful when trying to determine the focal point.
I love the little lines coming from the render. I think you did a good job on those. Maybe a
little less opacity, but whatever.
Oh, and not really digging that .. uhm, blotch on the left. It kind of fits in, but after staring at the banner for a while it starts to make me wonder what it is.
.. what is it?
Anyway yeah .. a lot better than your previous, but could still use some touching up.
Lose the border.
6/10.
P.S.
I know the white splotch is blinding...i can't get it out :<
Just read that, so .. yeah.
Mmm .. alrighty. text is a little better. I'm not really liking that 'Ice Cold' font, but that's just my 'taste'.
The whole thing needs some depth, I think, which also means, AGAIN, it needs a better focal point. Flow would be another good thing to see in this tag. I mean, his arms are going like, diagonal across the banner, parallel to the smoke (just about). Then you have those C4D's going like, everywhere. :S
But yeah, that's really all I have to say for this one.
5/10.