Toms Journey

[dakelland12]

Tom is now 10 and gets his torchick from the professor enjoy Issue 1 there will be more.

Issue 1
issue2
issue3

these are the site were i got sprites https://www.pokemonelite2000.com/index.html

 

[Esupio]

Woah.
Why are the panel's so big?
an ideal size is inbetween 200 x 200 pixels or 150 x 150 pixels
Also improve your speech bubbles, and your grammar.
I'm sure they'll love to meat again.

 

[dakelland12]

thanks Uzumaki Kaen i like what you said

 

[Shadow Weavile]

your comic is a lil bit weird with the fight
one attack and mudkip lose from torcich and what uzumaki kean saiyd work on your grammer and make better speech bubbles
if u fix it it wil be a good comic

 

[dakelland12]

how can i make better speach bubbles? if you want you could give me some i will make the battles longer i promise

 

[[NovaPirate]]

Make them a bit small, anf you don't need such thick outlines. Work on your grammar, and get better battle sprites, a rectangle with red in it does not count. Also, there are three poke'ball's before and after Tom gets his poke'mon. You might want to edit the Main Character's Overworld, and not to a generic plot.

 

[dakelland12]

i have changed what you said about the 3 pokeball thing thnks Astral Maelstrom

 

[Safao]

... whoa.... dude... grammar and pannels...

 

[Tyranitar248]

your battles need to be a bit longer
you need to use a bit bettr grammer
speech bubbles need to be a bit smaller

 

[dakelland12]

i have put up issue 2 enjoy

 

[JBCBlank]

That was..................... interesting....

~JBCBlank

 

[Bluefox06]

Hmm... well issue 2 is better. I like your style of things hapaning out of the blue and your time line but it needs for icing if ya know what i mean ;)

 

[Shadow Weavile]

issue 2 is a lot better then the first one if u keep doing it like issue 2 u will have a great comic ;)

 

[dakelland12]

thanks for the comments i will do more comics

i have put up issue3 enjoy

 

[Pikachu_Charizard]

Like everyone else has said improve grammer, have smaller text boxes, less words, also try to add something original , a comic about a guy getting a Pokemon and going on an Pokemon Adventure is a bit ..... boring.
Still good work!

 

[dakelland12]

at the minute i am working on the last comic of this but there will be more. in the last comic of toms journy there will be a twist and i hope you will like it i am not telling you what happens it it not untill you see it. befor i will release it there will be more comics on toms journy around 3 to 4 more after that i will relese the final one. then i will make a new storry line but there will be diffret charactors in it and there will be twam chaos in it like in this one.

 

[DanyelleTheUmbreon]

That comic is good, I`ve already read all three issus. ^^

All you need to do is maybe before you make the comic, just to be sure go through a spellcheck or something because you missed some letters in some words and spelled some words wrong.(I think you`re propably just rushing a tiny bit?) Also I see some homophones in there mixed up like meat and meet. Anyways, fix your grammar, and make sure you go over it so you can get it as right as possible! ^^

 

[dakelland12]

i will make some more comic but not right now.