Recent content by Tycho

Your name is familiar, but I don't remember where from...

Hello back.

I'm with ChrisTom, could you please try to be more responsive about accepting RP's?

Name: Lloyd Anderson Arena Name: Epoch Age: 16 Gender: Male History: Lloyd came from a difficult family on the outskirts of Pewter. They often neglected their house work, and if Lloyd didn't cook, there was no food for that meal. Despite this, Lloyd worked to overcome it. He didn't work to keep...

Nope. Only hidden power. Sorry.

Normally it is preferred to post your story in separate posts for each chapter, for future reference. I don't have time to review it all now, but I can check your Prologue for you. (All green text is part of the review) If you are interested, I'll review the rest of the chapter for you by PM.

As it turns out, Blue Screen of Death is my brother. Be he told me earlier today he doesn't plan on being very active here (his exact words were: I don't plan on going back there), so I'm somewhat disappointed. Anyways, thanks for the welcomes!

Where to start... Your story is riddled with fragment sentences and has almost no transitions. Not to mention it is just plain short. It needs more meat on its bones! Add some description and maybe throw in some of your main characters thoughts on the events. I'll be more in depth when there is...

Just sayin' hi. I'm new here, but am not new to the whole forum experience. I saw my brother here earlier this week and thought "That place looks interesting." So I registered. I didn't catch his full username, but I think it was 'Blue Screen' or something like that. Who knows. Maybe someone...