^^ It's a date I chose...no more telling, though.
Sorry, sorry, I just reviewed Zammy's fic and that took so much time, so I was a bit tired, but I'll review now. ^^;;;; I'm sorry, but it will be a bit shorter than usually.
Title made me wonder...either Lucian & his father or Lucian wonders if he's truly Roy's father and not some other, blue haired guy *coughs*.
He began wondering, did Cynthia truly love him? And if she did not, then why was he here?
Because he has to take care of Roy since his mom rather wants to conquer the world than to take care of her son? >>;;;
Despite the fact that they were rich,
Interesting, Lucian's family is rich...may I take this over into my fic, plz? ^^ (Why do I even ask...I know you want to secretly take over my style...*g*)
Lucian's father went so far as to physically abuse his wife.
Ouch. >< Poor boy.
I promise, if I ever get married, I'll never treat my wife like that, Lucian thought. I'll treat my wife like a queen.
Well, technically, she's not his wife yet.
*giggles* And that's a problem?
"You better grow up soon, boy, and learn not to let women push you around!" his father screamed.
He never learned that
and Will did neither, yet I'm not unhappy about that.
However, his father, also a psychic, defeated him easily, and embarrassed the poor boy in front of his hurting mother
Ouch, poor boy, again.
Lucian knew where his grandfather lived, on Route 228.
Yay for in-game references!
"What kind of person do you think you are, just coming right back here after abandoning us like that?" his father yelled. "I refuse to even call you my son!"
"Mother?" Lucian pleaded.
"I'm sorry, Lucian… but you abandoned us," his mother added.
Ouch, poor boy, third time. >< Where's the association for cruelty to fanfic characters again?
all he could think about was how alone he was, and how he needed someone to fill that hole in his life. That person was Cynthia.
It's not only Cynthia who has serious personality problems...
"I promise to remain loyal to you… please remain loyal to me."
"I will never let anyone come between us, Lucian,"
...problaby most important sentence in that chapter. Will she stay loyal to him, even after what happened with Cyrus? I do not know, I'm not the author...
Lucian heard reports on the news about a man who had killed his wife before killing himself.
O,O Poor boy, fourth time.
Lucian began to notice that Cynthia was spending more time training Karen than with him, and he became jealous.
Wtf, he's jealous..of a woman?!?!
"Those three would never accept you as queen," Lucian told Cynthia. "If you ever want to become queen, you must get rid of them."
"I know, but how?" Cynthia replied. "I can't just wipe them off the face of the earth."
Lucian gave Cynthia an evil grin.
"Yes, you can!" Lucian said. "You have the power to do just that."
Lucian seems to be just as evil, if not even more evil than Cynthia suddenly. o,o
When Cynthia failed to reach the championship round, Lucian came to her, asking for her to take revenge on all their fellow competitors.
WTF??!?!?!?
Lucian had no idea that his girlfriend had become pregnant. He cried every day, wishing only to see and touch Cynthia, yet the cold stone wall separated the two of them.
>.< I hate the two for almost killing Sabrina & Will, yet the way you describe this makes me feel so sorry for Lucian...argh, you're a really good writer to manage this balance.
Afterwards, however, Cynthia promised Lucian that she would marry him that coming Saturday.
Now it's only the question...what WILL happen on that Saturday? Anything could happen, anything...from Sabrina dying, to Cyrus showing up, to... I don't know. But it will surely be an important event.
He could only wonder if her happiness was contingent on his presence - or whether he was completely unnecessary to her.
Really, really good sentence again. Just perfect wording. And nice 'twist'. Hehehe...
