October 16th, 2008, 4:08 PM
Sadly, this poem is no longer available. =[
October 24th, 2008, 12:39 AM
You are right that it is a poem, yes. However there are so many others like that. So why bother?
In fact, there are umpteen other poems like that. I don't wish to sound ignorant nor arrogant but it just seems so repetitive. I think that if you just let the creativity flow a little more instead of trying to make every inch of the poem exactly perfect with precision you'd get a few more comments on it. Let it flow. I don't see much flowing in that poem. I would, however, like to see some more of your poems. If you take on my advice, that is.
Edit: Looking at your other poems - Tick for example - I feel rather mean for my comments. I prefer your writing with Tick still, compared to this one.