View Full Version : *Not Just a Game* Sprite Comic

October 24th, 2008, 11:49 AM
Issue #1 (http://img528.imageshack.us/img528/2323/aconfusingawakeninghd1.png)

The first of several installments to come (Hopefully)! Constructive criticism accepted!
Credit goes to the folks at Spriters Resource!

Glitter Stain
October 24th, 2008, 2:51 PM
Fix the text, crappy text boxes, lack of proper comma usage, and background color, and you've got a pretty nice comic here.

October 24th, 2008, 3:07 PM
I'm going to go ahead and guess that this comic is about a person trapped in their Pokemon game and the only way to get out will be to 'beat the game.'

Seriously, this is a cliche. If that's not the plot, then go ahead. Fix what Mobile Tsk said, possibly get a more creative hero sprite, stay away from multiple staircases in a row (A grand staircase, maybe, of multiple fused together), and work on the plot. So far, it seems to be taking the above direction. Nothing turns away people like a dull and/or overused plot.

October 24th, 2008, 3:45 PM
I need some advice color wise, I just chose the colors because I had honestly no idea what else to use. As for the plot, I guess that is vaguely similar to what I'm going to do. Kinda sorta. Not really. As for the text, is it the font or the dialog that's the problem? Thanks for the suggestions, but some of them weren't quite specific enough.


Sigh... I checked my calander, and I Just figured out that I have about 5000000 other projects going, so I won't have time to update this even somewhat frequently. I'm discontinuing this, and I just started this like, a couple of hours ago. This thread can be locked.

October 24th, 2008, 3:51 PM
It's the font they mean, I don't see much wrong with the script other than a few grammatical issues.