View Full Version : Moments of nothing

September 21st, 2009, 7:48 PM
I want to have what I used
to have. The things that had
belonged to me.
The things that had made me
happy,sad, and even angry.
I want what I used to have
because nothing here
now is what I thought it all be.
I want what I used to have
that's so modern ans simple
that no money can buy
I want it all back because
it used to be and suppose to be
what was in the future
and present that I am in now.
I want what I had owned
fair and square.
I want it no matter the
line. I want it all because I
care and that it was once
something precious that had
belonged to me.

September 21st, 2009, 7:58 PM
Nice Rhythm, mediocre structure, though I do expect more than this to create a nice flowing poem to represent dark moods.

September 21st, 2009, 9:01 PM
Thanks Cookie. for the compliment

September 23rd, 2009, 6:03 PM
Wow. You're writing is really awesome! It made me feel so nostalgic!