View Full Version : My first poem in a really long time

September 23rd, 2009, 7:52 PM
In school our teacher gives us writing prompts (sometimes) and we are supposed to write anything about it so she gave us this painting by Marc Chagall.
Our teacher only gives us about five minutes so it's not that good. (Oh! and the "Titanic"-boat looking thing- is on the top right corner)
(Remember people! This is abstract art and it's hard to decipher-For me anyways)

Is it a clown or something else?
Of all the shapes, I can't make heads or tails
Could it be a scientist?
Do I see Titanic in the mist?
Cat (or rat) watches as he makes a list
It's a ferret they insist

(The last line has been modified due to a complaint but the rhyme scheme was a,a,b,b,b,b,b)

Criticism accepted!

Thanks for the heads up GoingPokemonCrazy777!

The Jewel of Life
September 23rd, 2009, 8:29 PM
I think that this is very good. I lake how it rhymes, not at the beginning though. I don't think that there is anything wrong with this poem, I certainly couldn't write something that good myself. But what do I know? I'm only just another member of the PokeCommunity.

P.S. That last line made me laugh out loud. (Yeah, I wrote it out. WHAT NOW!)

September 23rd, 2009, 9:53 PM
Hahahahaha. Don't worry, I write it out sometimes too. And I also like putting a laugh instead of LOL or writing it out (Like at the beginning)

Good Night Pokecommunity! I am going to bed now.