First Prey (poem)

Dragonfree

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    The battle is over and innocent blood has been spilt.
    My victim?s unfortunate body fell prey to my flame.
    But I can?t help this feeling I?m simply no longer the same;
    My stomach seems sick and my heart filled with horrible guilt.

    My eyes start to wet, uncontrollably wanting to weep.
    My heart screams in pain when I look at the corpse with regret;
    I don?t want to kill, I just want to live and forget.
    Slowly, with sadness, I let myself drift into sleep.

    I dream of my future, I see myself treated with fear;
    The others respect me but only because I can kill.
    All of them mindlessly, fearfully obey my will:
    The horrified whimpers are oddly appeasing to hear.

    I wake up with knowledge that killing will do me no bad,
    My feelings like ice; neither angry nor happy or sad.
     
    This is good. I mean, it's different. You've chosen interesting lines to rhyme, but you've made it work. It's wonderfully nondescriptive. Seriously, it's a good thing. it gets in depth with the emotions, but by not giving a specific example, you've left it open to interpretation. Good job.
     
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