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the forgotten cherry blossom
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    Chapter One

    A cute little Chikorita was basking in the sunlight. Its trainer, Sarah, was under a tree in the shade.

    ?Chika!? Chikorita playfully played with its friends, Cynda, a Cyndaquil, and Blastgun, a Vaporeon. Both of them are owned by Sarah as well.

    ?Chika, chika!? Chikorita said to its friends. What it actually is saying is: ?Let?s go get some berries in the forest. I?m hungry!?

    ?Cyndaquil, Cynda!? Cynda agreed.

    The three friends headed straight for the forest nearby, panting as they run.

    ?Vaporeon!? Vaporeon cried as a bush of Cheri Berries loomed before them.

    ?Let?s go pick them,? Chikorita said happily and dug herself into the bush. Cynda and Blastgun joined in.

    By dusk, the three Pokemon finished their berries finally. They were all full, and were prepared to head down back to Sarah.

    ?C?mon,? Chikorita urged. ?Sarah?s waiting for us!?

    By the time they reached the big tree Sarah was sitting under, she was gone.

    ?Sarah! Where?d she go?? Chikorita wondered.

    ?I don?t know,? Blastgun replied. ?Look, her pack and stuff are gone!?

    ?Not a chance!? Chikorita said stubbornly and checked a couple of bushes. ?Hello! Sarah, are you there??

    There was no reply.

    ?Oh, this is hopeless,? Cynda sighed. ?Sarah forgot about us and left us all alone!?

    ?Sarah can?t forget us!? Chikorita burst into an outrage. Then she muttered, ?Or did she??

    ?Face it, Chika,? Blastgun piped up, ?Sarah could have abandoned us into the wild!?

    ?Maybe you?re right,? Chika replied sadly. ?We are Pokemon, and we could live in the wild-right??

    ?No use,? Cynda said quietly, ?We were born tamed.?

    ?I don?t believe you,? Chika replied angrily. ?We can live in the wild, because we?re Pokemon!?

    ?You?ll see,? Cynda muttered.

    Chika, Blastgun, and Cynda ran back to the forest to find food. Soon they?ll know that danger lie on every path?
     
    Im sorry, I dont mean to be mean but this sounds like it was written by an elementary schooler! This story is like all dialogue and practically no description and detail. Dont just make the story a whole bunch of talking! I suggest you read this thread so you can improve next chapter


    https://www.pokecommunity.com/threads/29844
     
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