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Other Lip
July 2nd, 2005, 11:16 AM
This is me writeing random lines that ryhme. It has a vauge meaning... Yet I don't know what it means :P

Deserted fantasies, discarded at the spotlight

Wills no longer strong, not the iron hero I knew

Is it mature, a realization that therere things you cant fight?

What has become of this soul untainted what has become of you?

Other days of sorrow and waste, lain down to hide

The marrowbone and loneliness, the remains of war

The isolation and vague memories inside

Yet runs deep this deep craving for more

Left alone in the dark to grow

What does it mean? Death, silence and fear?

What could it mean to avoid it with tears?

How does this cowardice with this maliciousness,

Equal this tempest of years?

Upon reading over it I think it reminds me of soilders...

Cybex Mewtwo
July 2nd, 2005, 3:16 PM
Hmm...kinda makes me think of the battlefield...the emptyness shown in war-torn soldiers...pretty deep. Great work.

Other Lip
July 3rd, 2005, 8:36 AM

I don't think it is up to standerd with other works...

It has been a while since I've written poetry.