Eien~

I notice that there are too many sad poems here in Other Writing, Poetry forum. Come on, people! Cheer up!

Here's a poem for you guys!

Eien~
by Niko

Through the spiral staircase we ascend,
And holding hands as we would play pretend?
We would reach the top tower and watch twilight
And see the sun shine red with blinding light!

And we descend and run across borderland,
Run like the wind and hold tight my hand!
Forever never meant ever forsaking?
The beauty I have found during spring.

And my love, like fireworks in the night?
Will shoot up, explode and give light
To the darkest corners of my heart
For eternity can never make us part.

And let us leave this world of fake:
To above where no one can ache.
And together, we shall be one forever,
And together we kiss in this eternal bliss!

Very nice work here. I enjoyed reading this.

Why thank you for commenting. My friend and I have decided to make a song out of this, him being the bassist and me the guitarist and all.

But yeah... I don't know if anyone found any musical allusions in the poem. Woudl be happy if someone found out... ;D

eien means eternity or forever right? ah meh

and assuming you wanted to rhyme everything
forsaking — spring
rhyme's on Aking, but meh it still sounds good with this

as for a song...meh may work, but i'm not that good musically anyways XD

They're slant rhymes, Digi.. XD

I'm amazed you didn't criticize the rhythm like always... >>