View Full Version : What You Never Knew About Celebi

March 28th, 2004, 12:30 PM
Hi folks! Blizzard here. Ever wonder if Celebi was hiding secrets? Well, he sure is. How do I know Celebi's a boy? Well, he told me first hand. With some help from Mandy (cause who can write with paws, after all?), I will now tell you what Celebi kept from you anytime you saw him.

---Synopsis: Young Aaron Berns saw Celebi. But he's not alone. Another legendary Pokemon has seen Celebi, and knows his entire story. When Aaron meets this Pokemon, he finds out more than anyone ever knew about the legendary Grass/Psychic Celebi... and has to live with these facts as he meets with old friends who are frightened by the truth.---

So how does that sound? Like it or not, I'm going to revitalize my writing career...

Pikachu and Torchic
March 28th, 2004, 3:22 PM
But...I read it.And people might be reading it but no replying.

Abolishing Flames
March 28th, 2004, 3:28 PM
Being dragged by my cousin to read his fanfiction and correct it, I've learned the arts of criticism. First of all, your story lacks organization and plot, second, try to not use the reply box to write your story. Third, try to improve your grammar and spelling. Fourth, try to be patient and try to seperate quotes with quotation marks (") and try to be original...

Abolishing Flames (Editor of "Ties of Love and Friendship)

March 28th, 2004, 3:44 PM
What the h*** are you talking about? I had great spelling. But that's fine... that means no more story. After all, that's your motive, isn't it?

paige pelletier
March 28th, 2004, 3:44 PM
"awww don't be so mean it was great!"

March 28th, 2004, 3:47 PM
That's just what my online RP friends would say. AF is right, it was a terrible idea to begin with. And don't expect anything else from me...

Abolishing Flames
March 28th, 2004, 3:50 PM
What the h*** are you talking about? I had great spelling. But that's fine... that means no more story. After all, that's your motive, isn't it?

Hmm... try running your story through Microsoft Word... you'll see a lot of green and Red lines... My motive's not to discourage you, it's just that you should improve writing. My cousin writes a long story and he gets the occasional, infamous, writer's block. I tell you, people who write one paragraph chapters will soon realize how hard writing is and it will be a horrible realization. Anyway, try to be more descriptive and try seperating quotes from paragraphs and try making it longer.

edit: good thing Oni's not in a bad mood... he'll find you more like a big giant target of constructive critisicm if he's angry...

March 28th, 2004, 3:59 PM
Didn't you see what happened AF? Blizzard just up and quit. It was in the New Users section and everything... he just left in a huff. Not to say you're to blame... just that's what happened... anyway I'm gonna pick up on his idea, because I don't think it was terrible. It just needed some work, that's all. And I'd be honored if you'd help me a little...

Abolishing Flames
March 28th, 2004, 4:08 PM
Well, I'd be honored if I could help... the thing is, I see Oni criticize like crazy in other boards and they just follow him. The moment I try to criticize, people just stop their fics... odd... (btw, I'm just as innactive as Oni. This means that If you want my help, I'll be up at once a week)