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fallen_angel

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    Hey everybody I hope you enjoy this poem. ^_^

    Search and Find

    No on seems to understand,
    just who I am.
    Looking but not seeing,
    searching but not finding.

    I try to make it easy,
    for them to search and find.
    The road is not so easy,
    it tiries my mind.

    What more can I say.
    its the same everyday.
    Eating me up
    deep inside.

    Waiting for the one who will,
    search and find, look and see.
    So, then there will be,
    no more misery for me.​
     
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    Yay!

    This one is really good.

    Your rhyming is awesome but the rhythm could be a little better. I think you could have each little verse to be a bit longer.

    Keep up the woderful work! =D
     
    The rhythm was a little off, but it wasn't bad]/I]. I think you're doing wonderful work, and improving as well, far as I can see. Keep it up, fallen angel, and you'd ve suprised where you can go.
     
    ...that was a nice poem....i really liked it...your rhyming is very nice and a little catchy...hehe....but im already here i already found you...i wont leave your side...im always here...beside you...ü
     
    Thanks everybody. Awww thanks phantom_of_death......i'll never leave your side.
     
    bravo Bravo I like it. keep it up.
     
    I think its wonderful! You're Good!
     
    haha I can't spell very well. Thanks everybody!
     
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