Rescue Me

code zerro the deluge

I'm a boss.
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    Rescue from this man made hell
    I hate leving here I want to leave now
    Rescue me ring the bell
    Cause my life sucks and I'm ready to go


    I cant stay here any longer
    I have been shot down
    Muderd spirte and soul
    But you you still say why?

    But I say over and over again
    Save me before I am slain
    Cause I dont want to leave you
    I cant do with out you
     
    Well I guess its okay...you have quite alot spelling mistakes as well, also is this ment to rhyme?
     
    [SIZE="-7"]At first glance, it seems a bit cliché, but who am I to judge that?

    I'd have to take off for the spelling mistakes and lax English, but otherwise...

    I've read your older stuff. All 6,000,000 or so of them. ...Lol

    You've written a .ton. of material in this section. But most of them didn't have any real change in style or anything. Mostly rap, and most of which I didn't like very much.

    Though it may be a little cliché in my opinion, it's a step in a different direction for you. If your future work is more like this, but on different topics, I think you may get some more views.

    Review: Favorable.

    - John[/SIZE]
     
    thanx Blackheart. you are my favorite poet on here so thanx for saying that.
     
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