Neo Emolga

Gonna revive it or is it gone?

So... Is the RP just dead then?

When the rp starts?

Heya =) just dropping by to let you know I've not stopped reading your fanfic, I've just been away from the forum for a few days and need to catch up! XD I think I got to chapter 12 yesterday. It's still great =D I'll post a review when I've caught up!

Hello. I looked over your review, and I think I need to restate what I said about neglecting Victory City's description. You're right - you did provide a description of adequate length to describe the city. The problem is, the description isn't to the point. From that description, I don't know what kinds of buildings are in the city (lots of skyscrapers, or shorter buildings?) what the streets are like, what kind of shops and restaurants are around, the nitty-gritty of a city. The description needs to have more emphasis on providing as many important details in a short span. My advice is to take images off the internet and focus on making as concise a description as possible without stripping any details, because at this point, your descriptive language is the weakest part of the storytelling.

On the otherhand, I would argue that your characterization is your strong point - you have a solid grasp on how your characters would react to a given situation.

Say, are you the same Neo Emolga from PE2K? =)