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Yeah, it's pretty obvious I have the worst update schedule on Earth... ~~~ A veneer cracked. Pascal's comment was not returned by a smile. Eniko merely continued to chuckle in place. Kay♂ extended his arm to her shoulder, "Hey, are you o-" "Get away!", Eniko whispered angrily towards Kay♂...

I've just caught up on this story again, and I am EXCITED about the the next chapter. I'm amazed how you could change the entire trajectory of the story so deftly. I'll definitely keep following.

Author's Note: Yay for completely unexpected updates. Yeah, I suck with updating. I really don't know what happened, I ended up getting really busy with a lot of different things and never getting back to this. But yeah, I churned this out, and I'll definitely work to get back to a seemingly...

Thanks for the encouragement! Sorry, but the next chapter got a lot more delayed that I thought it would be because of a variety of personal stuff. I hope to get it up by the end of this weekend though. :)

Hey, Ally trains her Pokemon like I write fan fiction. I approve whole-heartedly. I thought the whole realization of mortality seemed a bit strange and forced until I realize that the high mortality of Pokemon training has really been the elephant in the room. I think it adds a nice touch on...

The concept of a mother trailing a trainer is simply TOO funny to not read; especially for those of us with similar mothers. :laugh: I popped at the first two chapters, and I'm already chuckling. Anyways, I really like reading stories with OCs, as long as they're not archetypal characters...

Actually, I could easily expand this. 1. James: He's just such a sweet guy. And I still like bishies even if he does parody it a bit. 2. Harley: Hysterical, and I love when he connives. And I think I'm the only one who likes the way he looks...and young-Harley cranks the cuteness up to eleven...

Thanks for the primers Giratini! They were very helpful. Also, sorry for being later than I said I would be. If you want, you can blame Giratini because after I saw her comments, I went back into my rough draft and fixed tons of mistakes (which of course took extra time). So thanks for the help...

Thanks! And uh...you're supposed to get a bit more than squares but you're not really losing too much. If you ever get around to reading Chapter 1, I'd really like to see which type of style you liked better. Thanks! I decided to write Chapter 2 in third person after seeing this, so I can can...

1. James. Yeah, that's about it for me. :)

Well, now that I feel pretty bad about what was clearly a one-line psuedo-review after being suitably shamed by Val, I'll try to point out more specific stuff I didn't like. Obviously, I liked the fic as a whole, but there was a few stuff I didn't like. 1. I found the Pokemon dialogue a bit...

Hmm, I've never actually played Pokemon Emerald so my commentary might be off, but here goes. I loved that. And all of the pepper spray references peppered throughout the story. (Yeah, that pun was AWFUL.) I always like snarky characters, so I'm interested to see how you develop Topaz. I feel...

Well, I figured I engage in far too much telling and too little showing. And to an extent, first-person is...enabling that. So I'll make a shift in the first actual chapter to another perspective. I probably can't get away with it, but I hope it will be...a better work now. Because I think that...

... ... I should have expected that kind of background, but it still makes an impact. Such an impact. I really don't know what to say.

I'm actually even more fascinated now. I have a feeling that the sequel will make me feel guilty for harboring such animosity toward Paul. Well, as much animosity as a fictional character can engender. Paul comes off at first glance as a fairly one-dimensional character, but I'm attributing that...