Recent content by Cutlerine

Thank you very much, to you and to everyone else. You're all very kind, and I really appreciate the support you've given this story, whether by posting or just by reading. Unfortunately, as I've been uncomfortably aware for a long time now, Crack'd is moving towards an ending that supports a...

I'm a fan of Borges and the other magical realists, and I have a huge thing for the New Weird (I would do unspeakable things in order to meet China Miéville), but I'm not picky about it; I'll read anything as long as it's well-written. I'm interested in intersections of this reality with the...

Let's give it a shot, shall we? Something autumnal, I think, for this special time of year. A thin snarl of wind— The forest shrugs its shoulders— Leaves, and then silence.

First of all, can I suggest a formatting thing? It would make it much more pleasant to read if you left a space between paragraphs here. It's the conventional thing to do online - it's so much easier on the eyes - and you might be losing potential readers if they click to your story and see a...

This reads a bit like a précis of a novel rather than a short story: everything's compressed down into one or two sentences, and I'm not sure the reader quite gets enough of the right information to be satisfied. For example, we don't really know anything about any of the locations the story...

More of the garden analogy: this story is poison ivy: lush and inviting, but treacherous. It and I disagree about certain things on fundamental levels, and with various other things that are going on right now I'm not really feeling up to rehabilitating it. It's easier for me to just kill it now...

That ought to be singular: there is only one bullseye on a target. Rather than "he's", I'd put "he was" - otherwise you automatically read it as a contraction of "he is", which is disconcerting. I'm not entirely convinced by this. Is this person going to drench them all purely because...

I'm all right at dialogue and description, I think (though there is always room for improvement), but I have problems keeping the structure of a story tight when I post it chapter by chapter; I have a feeling that things begin to unravel a little unless I can keep going back to it and reknotting...

I've been thinking about this for some time now, and I'm afraid to say that I can't continue writing this story. It's not that I'm bored with it, or that I don't know where to take it, but for a variety of reasons, ideological, artistic and personal, I simply can't in good conscience keep going...

Hey, it's Misheard Whisper! I'm probably the last person to notice that you've reappeared - you may blame the vicissitudes of life for distracting me, or perhaps just me for being absent - but it's nice to see you back. It's also good to hear that Champion Game isn't dead; I always liked that...

Hm. Interesting question: I'm not sure I get that when posting my work online. I used to get quite nervous about showing my work to people in person, but I never felt nervous about posting it online; maybe it's because I can't see the other person's face when they're reading it. Now I don't get...

Hm. I've only read the first two chapters, but since it's now getting late here I thought I'd leave a review now and come back to finish things off tomorrow. This really is quite a good piece of work: some proper thought's gone into the characters and into how they interact, which is something...

Did I hear a call for criticism? I don't believe I've seen you here before, so first of all - welcome to FF&W! I hope your stay here is a pleasant one. Right. Let's get down to brass tacks: as you mentioned, this part of the story is short. Very much so, in fact - it's almost like reading a...

I try, because I feel guilty if I don't - rightly or wrongly, I feel that by posting here I enter into a kind of contract to read as well as to write. But so few of them hold my interest that I can count the fanfictions I've actually finished on the fingers of one hand, and many of the rest make...

It depends on the story. I usually like to seal off any loose ends - perhaps leaving one or two for the purposes of intrigue - and give a sense that the story is not actually over. I see my writing (or at least the writing that I post online) as a craft of entertainment, and as such I try to end...