Recent content by lordledge

Wow, this is still as awesome as ever if not more! You seriously rock at this :) Can't wait for more

it's chloe cindy was from another fan fic, i made a mistake about it lol sill me X Problem fixed though, thanks for pointing it out

It's wicked! Maybe a little more description wouldn't hurt and try to make it a bit more paced, other than that it's awesome

Thanks a lot! All the changes have been made and i do greatly apreciate all the help you give me, I'm trying to improve but i was really eger to get this chapter up because i hadn't updated in ages. Thanks again.

Wow! I loved the chase part and the bit at the end, and thanks for doing the space thing it makes it a lot easier to read, keep up the awesome work!

This is good, I've made a few corrections, the words I've added are in bold, the words I've got rid of have been underlined and coloured red, the main word i crossed out was then ( it's used quiet a lot and it would sound better if it wasn't sometimes). Also a little more description would be...

Ah awesome thanks, the corrections have been made, sorry about that i didn't have much time to proof read. Thanks for the help and I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter, the next one should be up soon =)

Hey there, I'm liking this fanficiton a lot, it's got a nice flow and the way it's written gives of all the information you need slightly and allows it to settle in good work. But please try to leave a lines space in between each paragraph so it's easier to read. Nice work and keep them coming!

Thanks i really enjoyed writting that chapter and my gut was telling me it would go down well, the next one is nearly all mapped out I'm just selecting the best challenges to use and the ways to describe them etc the chapter should be done soon, hopefully by Monday

ok I've just read the first chapter and i wasn't overley impressed, you have to sell me your story within the first chapter people won't usually read on if they don't see anything to read on for if it's needed write a Prologue to spice it up a bit. Another irritating fact is discription, i see...

New Chapter In Kyle's Pokemon Adventure

Ok I'm here again please remember i am trying to help i don't just ridicule you for the banter. Ok let's get this fanfiction on the road! I'll point out where some of the mistakes are and all of that so that you can see them. I have put the corrections in bold, displayed below: (Corrections...

oh whoops did i miss that bit out wait a tic and I'll put it in, and thanks for the review =D The next chapter will be good as well if all goes to plan

There are a few things in the world that i am prepared to call a true work of art, writting is something i have a passion for and there is only one writter in the world who has ever made me cry (JK Rowling), but i must say that this fan fiction has brought me closer to tears than hundreds of...

well it wasn't bad, but it wasn't very good either. The prolgoue is meant to sell me the story and I'm not feeling comeplled at all to read the next chapter or any other after that, try using more descripted language and going into more detail, you only seemed to write notes so far, no points...