Recent content by Scourge of Nemo

Thanks for the feedback. Always good to hear you're giving 'em something new. I tinkered with the paragraph you pointed out a bit; flow feels a bit off, I think, but the confusion's gone. Mostly. Good catch. XD I don't think the direction will be clear for awhile, but hopefully this next part...

I rather like all of these ideas. I have to say that the Reviewing Profile looks like it could get very messy, un-updated, and forum-clogging--but if it takes off, could be especially fun.

FANCY SEEING YOU HERE, YOUNG GRASSHOPPAH. First things first. Opening paragraph. WEIRD GRAMMAR. MADE ME ANGRY ON THE INSIDE. "But the flame inside of me has a price; a heavy price; because the fire burns in my chest, in the place where my soul should be." Icky. Try: "But the flame inside me...

This is neat. I was a bit dubious at first--the emotions in the first paragraph came across as more... exaggeration? than a genuine melancholy. I feel like there might be a bit of a disconnect between how she frames the weirdness when she starts to tell it and how she frames the issue by the...

Title: Running Through Daisies Link: www(dot)pokecommunity(dot)com/showthread(dot)php?t=258435 Summary: In which the victims of fate get a little pissy. Genre: Fantasy, Horror, Sci-Fi, Supernatural Degree of Completion: Very, very in progress Chaptered Fic

I like to see characters who make bad decisions. Not stupid decisions, where you're just sitting there slamming your head against a desk because "Really, who in their right mind does that?" is the only coherent sentence you can get out. The sort of bad decisions that make sense, are good for bad...

Running Through Daisies [Part 2] In which the victims of fate get a little pissy.rating Currently PG-13 for mild language, violence, and... intensity...? DON'T BAN ME I'M LABELING IT. notes on stuff HI THERE. I'm new here. Not new to writing, though. I'm hoping to weasel my way into PC's...