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Old December 10th, 2007 (9:17 AM).
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The Abomination Lives!!!
     
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    Whoa... This was cool... It was pretty vivid and powerful for the most part, but like Griff said, there should've been a little more description of the Pokemon, even then, I could still see this happening. For some reason, though, it reminds me of a non-fanfic short story I did out of boredom a while back involving a wolf seeking vengence on a group of tribal hunters for killing off his pack, but resulted in his death. Only things that I really didn't appreciate much were the usage of the 'f' and 's' words, but then, it was PG-13 and they were sensored kinda. Hope you come up with some more shorts like this.
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