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Old April 27th, 2011 (11:24 PM).
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    As I have previously mention, I like this story, it seems interesting! Now, I'm not much of a critic, but there are some good critics on this forum, and they should be able to point out mistakes (unless they're really obvious, I don't always catch them).

    Lucifer's an. . interesting character (for lack of better words! Like I said, I can never think of descriptive words when I need them >_< )

    Though, I'm not quite sure how to pronounce Xandra.

    I think this is actually well written! There might be some gramatical errors, but i'll leave that to someone else, considering thats not in my general area of things.

    Good luck with the story!!
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