Thread: [Pokémon] The Checkers Story
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Old November 23rd, 2012 (11:24 AM).
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    Note:This not my first fanfic. It is my second Pokemon fanfic. I would like some nice, short criticism. I am very sensitive. Enjoy!

    I'm Checkers. I am an albino Umbreon with color changing rings. I came here from the Hoenn region. My mother and father had died in a terrible forest fire caused by a Pokemon battle gone a rye. I had managed to escape. I was alone for weeks. Then, one day when I was going to grab a berry from a nearby tree, I fell. And I never hit the ground! I landed on a trainer's head, in the middle of a city! Everyone saw it. A strange Pokemon appears out of nowhere and hits a trainer. You could imagine what happens next. The trainer and her Snivy jumped up. "Snivy! Use Leaf Tornado!" the trainer shouted. The Snivy started to spin. Leaves appeared around his body. Suddenly he threw all the leaves at me. They hit like daggers. Cutting my body. I was mad. I opened my mouth and a white ball formulated. It grew bigger and bigger. Then I screamed. The ball flew at the Snivy, knocking him out cold. White Shadow Ball, the strongest move I know. "Snivy! No!" the trainer said. She sent out another. "I'll catch you. No matter what it takes!" Now I was worried. I had to protect myself. I would be like that Snivy. Forced to live in a retched ball for the rest of my life. No. I had to stay free. "Go Mienshao! Use Drain Punch!" I dodged just in time. I used White Shadow Ball again. A Muna, Sandile, Joltik, and Emolga followed. I defeated each one easily. The trainer ran off to the Pokemon Center. She carelessly dropped five berries. I grabbed them and ran off. I was being pursued by trainers who want to catch me. I leaped into a hole. I landed in stank water. "The sewer. I'll hide here." I said. I stayed there.
    I am now a mother of one and have a lovely husband. He is a Nucleon (the poison type eevee-loution). I still long to go home. But I know that I never will. THE END
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