A taste of a story I am writing!
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January 6th, 2013 (9:36 PM).
Uh, I didn't do it
Welcome to Fanfiction and Writing. It looks like you're a fairly new member, so welcome!
First off, I noticed that there were quite a few grammatical mistakes in this. But the first thing that threw me off was the formatting. It's considered the 'standard' online format for fanfiction to put a full space in between each paragraph. This makes it easier to read online, otherwise it's a large block of text that can be hard to read.
For many of the grammar issues using a writing program, even something like Microsoft Word would help a ton, especially with the lower case 'i's
For now I won't go through the entire thing (perhaps someone else will), I suggest signing up for a beta at the Beta Place, it might help you out.
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