"G-Call"

Okay here's a quick rap I just thought of ,please post any comments

Okay let see dis is da G call
And it only be for da real brawl
Now don't hate at us Gs
Its da only thing dat help me
To stay alive, day to day
Aint an option till were dead
Our men get shot in da plot
We never reach da climax, its a never endin story
We go so low end up on Maury
Cuz we so different nobody like us
We never mean to hurt,cuz
And its a struggle for us Gs
We only feed on bread and cheese
We don't have drugs stashed in our trucks
They only smell cuz we dont care
We try to follow da right trail
But usually just end up in jail
Most of us grew without a dad
Some pople say "Well, dats just too bad"
And it aint our fault for our mistakes
We all humans with the same stakes
We all got diferent traits
But us Gs posses da best
We don't ever rest
We keep on fightin for our cause to be recognized without a pause
We are discriminated for our style
Our saggy pants last for just a while
We got much dough but even though
We don't have a spot in society
We grow up with such anxiety
Never went to school, lacked education
Never got a real proffession
Thats why we fight for our future generations
Its a call for all us Gs
So remember stay focused, please

That was long (I think)! That was quite good.

I don't understand it at all.. I'm usually good with reviewing songs and poetry, but this time I don't understand.. I'm sorry ^^; Maybe a brief summary would help.

Oh dear, I'm horrible with raps. X3~~~ Now, this doesn't mean your rap is bad - it only means I lack the talent of knowing the proper qualities of rap format. XD

I can help a little though. ^^; Instead of using one loooooooooong paragraph, raps go very well if they're broken into stanzas just like a poem. ^___^

So, just try to break your rap up a bit into little groups and such. :33

Well...that's about all I can do for you. XD Nice work, though! ^^

~Kelsey