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Old February 22nd, 2009 (10:27 PM).
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and his son, Layne (Buizel).
     
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    This is a song I've written a few monthes ago. It's a song that's gonna get used by my band I am now currently in. It's probably one of my darkest things I have written ever. Please give me some feedback. This is an anti-war ballad, a letter written to the mother of an unnamed soldier.

    Letter From No Man's Land

    [starts out soft and slow]

    [echoes] Mother........

    It’s not a secret anymore
    I have rotten to the core
    No one knows, what life has stored
    What the hell is this war for?


    Insanity traps me from inside
    War’s done nothing, but kill my pride
    Where I sleep, is a crimson tide
    It makes me want to run and hide

    [mini solo; still quiet]

    The stench of death looms in the air
    This insanity’s more than I can bare
    My life now, none shall spare
    Does anyone out there even care?

    Now I lay me down to sleep
    I pray the Lord, my soul to keep
    If I shall die before I wake
    I pray the Lord, my soul to take

    [mini solo leading to the bridge]

    [bridge; dynamics get louder]

    Death happens all around me
    It does nothing, but feed my inner insanity
    I no longer want to fight
    This just doesn’t seem all right
    I might fall in the abyss
    I just can’t take much more of this
    This all makes me want to yell
    Damn it all, damn it all straight to hell!

    ...mother please...I wanna go home...help me...

    [solo]

    [loudest point in this song]

    I just gotta flee this hell
    Peace, no longer can it sell
    Please, dear God, please hear my cry
    Take me with you, to the sky!

    Mother, I love you, I hope you know
    Love you, more than I could show
    I write this letter shedding tears
    I really wish that you were here!


    Mother I am freaking out
    I finally regain my right to shout
    This war itself has gone amok
    Yet no one seems to give a...

    [song ends abruptly as an explosion sounds followed by gunfire and war sound effects]

    ©2008
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