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Note: This is a story I'm working on for a character I'm playing; I'm not much of a writer, so feel free togive lots of constructive criticism. Here's some shameless advertising for the roleplay: https://goldenrodhs.proboards.com/index.cgi
Hope that's allowed, it's not exactly unrelated.
Thank you, moderators, for the title edit!
This will be a three part "oneshot" story, I think, being that this is an origin story.
On a side note, Etoire starts off by calling it Magik, based off it's name Magikarp. Later when it evolves, Etoire calls it Gyara, closer to it's new form of Gyarados.
Story begin!
Part 1: The Festival of Arceus
?Etty! It?s time to go!? a voice called out. Looking up from his toys, 8 year old Etoire put on a big grin and bounded down the steps excitedly, taking large bounding steps and risking missing a step or two. As expected, nearing the end of the staircase, he tripped over the last step; his eyes widened in horror as the floor came closer to his face until a pair of strong hands plucked him from midair, saving him from a quick bloody nose.
?And where are you going in such a rush? Look at you, falling all over yourself!? a strong but gentle voice admonished. Etoire looked bashful at his dad. He was excited, as to be expected?they were about to go to his favorite festival, the Festival of Arceus. The family always went to the annual festivals, and Etoire was excited to go see the show there.
An older boy popped out from the kitchen and waved erratically at Etoire who was still wriggling around in his dad?s hands. ?Hey, Etty, you?re so slow! Go get changed so we can leave!? He was practically bouncing up and down. Etoire grinned at his brother. They were all excited for the festival.
?Dad, where?s mom and sis? I don?t see them?? Etoire looked around the room quizzically. They were nowhere to be found, oddly enough. It was just him hanging limply from his dad's hands, his brother excitedly in the dining room and edging for the door, and his dad standing around.
?They?re waiting outside impatiently, now go! Get!? Etoire?s dad lightly put Etoire down before chasing him upstairs and helping him into his kimono. They were finally ready after a brief struggle with the sash, and the trio walked outside, "walk" being used in a very loose definition. The pair of boys were leapfrogging and doing cartwheels in their excitement, while the father looked bemused by the antics of his two sons. Waiting outside impatiently was Etoire and Brian's sister,Cynthia, who giggled when she saw how crazy her siblings were. Etoire's mother tightly grasped her sons' hands, not letting go of them in fear that they cartwheel into someone. "Silly boys." She smiled and began walking down the road with the struggling masses attached to her arms.
As they looked out to the main street, they heard the festival sounds and cheering and clapping. Etoire and Brian looked at one another before declaring in unison, ?We?re late! The show?s begun!? and tearing off down the street, finally free from their imprisonment. Their father chuckled and shook his head before calling out ?Be careful and don?t fall!? while their mother raised an eyebrow and clasped her daughter's hand instead. She was decidedly less prone to insane antics, in anycase.
Upon reaching the large crowd assembled before a stage, Etoire and Brian wriggled their way through the crowd until they reached the front where they could see. It was a play retelling the story of Arceus and the creation of the universe. Soon afterwards, their sister joined the fray to the mother's dismay, and they watched the story unfold in front of their eyes, eyes widening and mouth open as the actors performed.
After the show, Etoire?s mom chided her children ?Hey, you little rascals. You guys disappeared again! Next time you do that we won?t bring you here. And how was the show?? Brian?s eyes widened as he tried to explain all of what he had seen, making large hand motions and sound effects, bringing a stifled giggle from his siblings that was quickly stopped as he glared grumpily at them. It was a breathtaking experience as always, the three agreed before bouncing off to the booths. Etoire and Cynthia were suddenly picked up by their father ?So they don?t run off, little rascals they are? as he unceremoniously walked off with them in tow, one under each arm playing dead, with a large grin on his face while Brian was restrained by their mother.
After the show, the family usually visited the booths, eating and playing games, and so they headed off. Gently, Etoire's father let the two go, and the family slowly strode down the aisle looking at what was around. A handful of new booths and vendors had set up this year, but Etoire was only interested in one.
?Hey, Etoire! How was your year so far?? a comforting old voice called out as he passed by. It was the fishing booth, where people attempted to catch small fish with paper nets. Etoire never managed to catch one, but he loved trying. ?Hello grandpa!? Etoire said this out of habit as he bounded towards the fishing booth; he wasn?t really related to the man, but he felt close with him since he always came here.
?I still don't like school, it's boring. I still got into the top 10 though! Are those new fish?? Etoire gasped and jumped up and down, pointing excitedly to what appeared to be a covered tank. He couldn't see what was in it and it didn't make any noise either, but Etoire had never seen it here before. He was sure it was something amazing.
?Ohh, you got me. It?s a secret though. Have you gotten any better?? He smiled and gave Etoire a handful of nets. Excitedly, Etoire quickly went through them all before looking up with a stunned look on his face. ?I broke them all again.? he said with a silly look on his face. The old man chuckled when he saw Etoire?s face before taking the broken nets away from him. Etoire was always pretty bad at this game, and this year was no exception.
?Actually, Etoire, aside from your poor fishing skills, I?ve got some news for you. This is my last year coming to this festival; I?m getting old and the distance is too far." The old man tutted as Etoire was about to interrupt with complaints and sorrow. "This year I brought you something special, for always coming every year and making this old man laugh.? The old man walked over to the covered tank and reached in with a small bowl of water before giving it to Etoire. It was a pokemon egg, floating around in the bowl. Etoire looked at the old man in surprise.
?Isn?t that a pokemon egg?!? Etoire was surprised and humbled by this gift. He had seen a lot of pokemon and some trainers had walked into his parents PokeMart carrying eggs, but he never expected to get his own.
?Yes, it is. I?ve been meaning to get you one for a while, since you?re about to turn of age. Now then, that little one may seem like a burden at first, but shower him with love and eventually, you?ll see him for what he truly is.? The old man smiled before sending Etoire off on his way, a knowing twinkle in his eye.
When he had returned to his family with the pokemon egg in the fishbowl, Etoire's siblings oohed and aahed enviously while Etoire proudly showed it off. He wasn't sure what it was, except it was probably a fish. A few days later, when Etoire was staring at the egg wondering what it could be, muttering "Is it a Goldeen? Luvdisc? Oooh, I wonder what it is..." his father called out to him. "Hey, Etty, time for dinner! That's enough staring at the egg, it's not going to hatch just because you're staring at it."
Moments after that remark, suddenly a large glowing light enveloped the egg as it began to crack. Excitedly, Etoire called everyone over, as they all stared into the bowl. A very tiny baby Magikarp came out of the egg moments later, doing a small flourish as it exited the eggshell. Etoire looked quizzically at it--he'd never seen something like this before, none of the trainers had one. Maybe he had something legendary, something amazing! His parents smiled at their son's excitement.
Etoire wasn?t sure what it was, but he decided it would be his first pokemon he?d bring with him on his journey when he turned of age in two years, unaware of the new law prohibiting children under 18 to go on a pokemon journey.
Several months had passed and the Magikarp had grown happily larger. He and Etoire spent the majority of the day together, and Etoire had managed to persuade his parents to renovate the pool in the backyard into a large "aquarium" for the Magikarp. Etoire would often be found inside, horsing around with the Magikarp. His siblings and parents knew that a Magikarp was actually nothing special, but supplied Etoire with all of the interesting facts as to not crush his high hopes for the large fish.
Hope that's allowed, it's not exactly unrelated.
Thank you, moderators, for the title edit!
This will be a three part "oneshot" story, I think, being that this is an origin story.
On a side note, Etoire starts off by calling it Magik, based off it's name Magikarp. Later when it evolves, Etoire calls it Gyara, closer to it's new form of Gyarados.
Story begin!
Part 1: The Festival of Arceus
?Etty! It?s time to go!? a voice called out. Looking up from his toys, 8 year old Etoire put on a big grin and bounded down the steps excitedly, taking large bounding steps and risking missing a step or two. As expected, nearing the end of the staircase, he tripped over the last step; his eyes widened in horror as the floor came closer to his face until a pair of strong hands plucked him from midair, saving him from a quick bloody nose.
?And where are you going in such a rush? Look at you, falling all over yourself!? a strong but gentle voice admonished. Etoire looked bashful at his dad. He was excited, as to be expected?they were about to go to his favorite festival, the Festival of Arceus. The family always went to the annual festivals, and Etoire was excited to go see the show there.
An older boy popped out from the kitchen and waved erratically at Etoire who was still wriggling around in his dad?s hands. ?Hey, Etty, you?re so slow! Go get changed so we can leave!? He was practically bouncing up and down. Etoire grinned at his brother. They were all excited for the festival.
?Dad, where?s mom and sis? I don?t see them?? Etoire looked around the room quizzically. They were nowhere to be found, oddly enough. It was just him hanging limply from his dad's hands, his brother excitedly in the dining room and edging for the door, and his dad standing around.
?They?re waiting outside impatiently, now go! Get!? Etoire?s dad lightly put Etoire down before chasing him upstairs and helping him into his kimono. They were finally ready after a brief struggle with the sash, and the trio walked outside, "walk" being used in a very loose definition. The pair of boys were leapfrogging and doing cartwheels in their excitement, while the father looked bemused by the antics of his two sons. Waiting outside impatiently was Etoire and Brian's sister,Cynthia, who giggled when she saw how crazy her siblings were. Etoire's mother tightly grasped her sons' hands, not letting go of them in fear that they cartwheel into someone. "Silly boys." She smiled and began walking down the road with the struggling masses attached to her arms.
As they looked out to the main street, they heard the festival sounds and cheering and clapping. Etoire and Brian looked at one another before declaring in unison, ?We?re late! The show?s begun!? and tearing off down the street, finally free from their imprisonment. Their father chuckled and shook his head before calling out ?Be careful and don?t fall!? while their mother raised an eyebrow and clasped her daughter's hand instead. She was decidedly less prone to insane antics, in anycase.
Upon reaching the large crowd assembled before a stage, Etoire and Brian wriggled their way through the crowd until they reached the front where they could see. It was a play retelling the story of Arceus and the creation of the universe. Soon afterwards, their sister joined the fray to the mother's dismay, and they watched the story unfold in front of their eyes, eyes widening and mouth open as the actors performed.
After the show, Etoire?s mom chided her children ?Hey, you little rascals. You guys disappeared again! Next time you do that we won?t bring you here. And how was the show?? Brian?s eyes widened as he tried to explain all of what he had seen, making large hand motions and sound effects, bringing a stifled giggle from his siblings that was quickly stopped as he glared grumpily at them. It was a breathtaking experience as always, the three agreed before bouncing off to the booths. Etoire and Cynthia were suddenly picked up by their father ?So they don?t run off, little rascals they are? as he unceremoniously walked off with them in tow, one under each arm playing dead, with a large grin on his face while Brian was restrained by their mother.
After the show, the family usually visited the booths, eating and playing games, and so they headed off. Gently, Etoire's father let the two go, and the family slowly strode down the aisle looking at what was around. A handful of new booths and vendors had set up this year, but Etoire was only interested in one.
?Hey, Etoire! How was your year so far?? a comforting old voice called out as he passed by. It was the fishing booth, where people attempted to catch small fish with paper nets. Etoire never managed to catch one, but he loved trying. ?Hello grandpa!? Etoire said this out of habit as he bounded towards the fishing booth; he wasn?t really related to the man, but he felt close with him since he always came here.
?I still don't like school, it's boring. I still got into the top 10 though! Are those new fish?? Etoire gasped and jumped up and down, pointing excitedly to what appeared to be a covered tank. He couldn't see what was in it and it didn't make any noise either, but Etoire had never seen it here before. He was sure it was something amazing.
?Ohh, you got me. It?s a secret though. Have you gotten any better?? He smiled and gave Etoire a handful of nets. Excitedly, Etoire quickly went through them all before looking up with a stunned look on his face. ?I broke them all again.? he said with a silly look on his face. The old man chuckled when he saw Etoire?s face before taking the broken nets away from him. Etoire was always pretty bad at this game, and this year was no exception.
?Actually, Etoire, aside from your poor fishing skills, I?ve got some news for you. This is my last year coming to this festival; I?m getting old and the distance is too far." The old man tutted as Etoire was about to interrupt with complaints and sorrow. "This year I brought you something special, for always coming every year and making this old man laugh.? The old man walked over to the covered tank and reached in with a small bowl of water before giving it to Etoire. It was a pokemon egg, floating around in the bowl. Etoire looked at the old man in surprise.
?Isn?t that a pokemon egg?!? Etoire was surprised and humbled by this gift. He had seen a lot of pokemon and some trainers had walked into his parents PokeMart carrying eggs, but he never expected to get his own.
?Yes, it is. I?ve been meaning to get you one for a while, since you?re about to turn of age. Now then, that little one may seem like a burden at first, but shower him with love and eventually, you?ll see him for what he truly is.? The old man smiled before sending Etoire off on his way, a knowing twinkle in his eye.
When he had returned to his family with the pokemon egg in the fishbowl, Etoire's siblings oohed and aahed enviously while Etoire proudly showed it off. He wasn't sure what it was, except it was probably a fish. A few days later, when Etoire was staring at the egg wondering what it could be, muttering "Is it a Goldeen? Luvdisc? Oooh, I wonder what it is..." his father called out to him. "Hey, Etty, time for dinner! That's enough staring at the egg, it's not going to hatch just because you're staring at it."
Moments after that remark, suddenly a large glowing light enveloped the egg as it began to crack. Excitedly, Etoire called everyone over, as they all stared into the bowl. A very tiny baby Magikarp came out of the egg moments later, doing a small flourish as it exited the eggshell. Etoire looked quizzically at it--he'd never seen something like this before, none of the trainers had one. Maybe he had something legendary, something amazing! His parents smiled at their son's excitement.
Etoire wasn?t sure what it was, but he decided it would be his first pokemon he?d bring with him on his journey when he turned of age in two years, unaware of the new law prohibiting children under 18 to go on a pokemon journey.
Several months had passed and the Magikarp had grown happily larger. He and Etoire spent the majority of the day together, and Etoire had managed to persuade his parents to renovate the pool in the backyard into a large "aquarium" for the Magikarp. Etoire would often be found inside, horsing around with the Magikarp. His siblings and parents knew that a Magikarp was actually nothing special, but supplied Etoire with all of the interesting facts as to not crush his high hopes for the large fish.
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