A Hollow Heart Echos..

[FlameDancer]

A Hollow Heart Echos..

Drawing black circles
Into blue eyes
In pictures of you

I won't desecrate your name
Into a poem
That doesn't see thru
The color of your eyes

I know not the future
And the present is black
She has never felt my touch
And so i do not know
How gentle she really is

There is nothing
That i can say that will
Rise from the pit of my stomach
And escape from my faded smile
To capture her eyes

Thumbs seperate
These pictures of you
Brush over over your cheeks
Press against your heart
Tearing apart painful remeinders
Of broken men in pieces
Who wept for you
As the days closed in
Mumbling sweet nothings
While I waited

Now you can see why
Every shard of my heart
On the floor
Still gleaming
The reflection
Of your empty presence
Still breaks my skin
Every so often.

 

[TJgamer]

This poem is a mystery to me. But it brings back to mind of many of the mysterious writings of the great authors in the past.
You used very wonderful words for your descriptions.
A nice job well done.

 

[Zeffy]

Its good, imo. Like TJgamer said, your descriptions are really nice. You must really keep up the good work.

 

[Sephirothh Cloud]

i totally agree!
You described the pain and sadness so beautifully.
Kudos!

 

[Midnight Moon~]

This is amazing, the sadness touched upon my soul <3 *bookmarked* I particularly loved:

Every shard of my heart
On the floor
Still gleaming

By the way (simple typo, no big deal):

Tearing apart painful remeinders

Reminders is spelled..er...reminders. xD