A New Journey!!! *pg-13*

Jhotos_Power

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    it seems i have just arrived in the nick of time to help out kenta the greatest pokemon battler in history against the dreaded neo team rocket
    "well u have finally arrived" said kenta
    "sry if im late i had a little trouble with some rockets back there"
    "well all that matters now is that you are here now, we will need all the power we can get to stop neo team rocket be prepared for the worst"
    "yes sir"
    "well get ready!!! go typhlosion!!!" shouted kenta
    "go blaziken!!" i shouted
    "use flame wheel" kenta said
    "blaiken use blaze kick"i shouted
    "do you guys really think u have a chance?" said a neo grunt
    "yeah u have no chance against us!!" said another grunt
    "go charzard"yelled the grunt
    "go arcanine" shouted the other grunt
    "use flame thrower!!!" they shouted in harmoney
    as the powerful forces collied some thing so unpredictable happened something so horriable not even a hypno could of stop it from happing i WOKE UP!!!!!
     
    You need to work on you're spelling and punctuation...a lot! You use internet slang, yet this is a story. And the constant italics doesn't help either. But it is quite funny...but I think I could probably predict what will happen soon.
     
    hey can a mod close this thread plzz im going to stop making fan ficton's im not that good
     
    there's still no point in closing it, as it's not like it got flames or anything

    and everyone starts out bad for fanfic writing, but you'll just have to be consistent in order to improve. Learn from your reviews and do better next chapter/fanfic ^^
     
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