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As Cold As Ice - Rated PG-13 For Safety

KARR

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    I wrote this just last night, and corrected up some bits today.
    I rated it PG-13 for safety and because of what MIGHT end up in 'Part 4 - The Breaking Of The Ice'.

    As Cold As Ice

    Part 1 - Meeting

    ?So, Ash, tell me again why we?re heading for a giant desert?? asked Brock who still didn?t believe Max wasn?t there anymore.
    ?Look, we?re going to Orre to have a peak around, for some training, and Prof. Oak told me to go there,? explained Ash with a little irritation.
    ?Yeah, and I want to see the new Team Rocket in action. They?ve already done lots of good in Orre, like totally wiping out Cipher!? said May.
    The small minivan they were aboard just stopped in front of what looked like a steam train. They got out and the minivan went away.
    ?You?re Ash, Brock, and May, aren?t you?? asked a voice from behind.
    The three immediately turned around too see Wes and Rui, the famous two Rocket Admins.
    ?I?m Ash, and this is Brock and May. Who are you and what do you want?? Ash questioned the Admins.
    ?We have been instructed to take you too the Rocket HQ. Prof. Oak arranged a meeting for you with the Head,? answered Rui, trying to be serious, contrary to her real self.
    ?Prof. Oak? A meeting with a head? No, wait, how can a head exist without a body?? wondered Brock.
    Wes told Brock to be quiet and told them to go onto the OrreSpeeder X3, the newest model.
    Orre was a big desert, just like Brock imagined. But it had places that made it look not so much like a desert. After a few minutes the OrreSpeeder arrived in a beautiful town with wonderful parks and buildings. Pyrite.
    Wes and Rui took the trio to a building with a big, red ?R? on top. When they entered, Wes showed them to a lift. The lift went down, into what was once called The Under. Now it?s called the Rocket HQ.
    As the lift stopped, the three adventurers saw a great big glass dome.
    ?Those are the main offices. But we?re going up those stairs, to the Head?s room,? pointed Rui, still trying really hard.
    After climbing the steps and passing the Admin offices and the Executive?s office, a large matt glass door stood in front of them.
    ?Enter,? firmly said Wes and pointed at the door.
    The three went into a rather large room with a rather large desk. Behind it was a rather large leather chair. On the chair sat a young man about sixteen or seventeen.
    ?Hello there. I am John, the Head of Team Rocket.,? said the mysterious figure.
    ?Hey, they showed you in TV, didn?t they?? asked May while Brock and Ash still stood silent, astonished at the look (or rather the age) of the Head.
    ?Yes. Do sit down,? was the monotonic reply. John made an impression of a kind of robot. As if he had no feelings whatsoever.
    Ash, Brock and May sat down on comfortable, soft chairs.
    ?Why did Prof. Oak want us to meet you?? asked Ash.
    ?I?m a friend of his. I am to show you around Orre and there will be a very large battle between you and me in the Tower Colosseum. Tomorrow. I hope all your friends invited will come. I have made all efforts to track them all down. But there will also be large crowds. You and I, we have many fans, you see,? explanied still very coldly John.
    ?Why wasn?t I told of this?!? asked Ash.
    ?All in good time, all in good time,? was the reply. Still feelingless.
    ?Look, whoever you are and whatever they say about you, your servants made us come here and we?re told what we should do? Explain yourself! And tell us why you speak so coldly and feelinglessly!? screamed May. Brock and Ash where looking at her as if she just had severely injured someone.
    ?Very well. I think the fault lies on Prof. Oak?s side. I was not to inform you. And my co-workers were to take you here. I think I might need a word with them. Were they not nice or something??
    ?Kind of, and they spoke like you!?, muttered May, slowly and unsurely calming down.
    ?I think they must have been jokeful about that. I?m sorry, but all these years, I was lonely and this made me like I am. It cannot be changed, I think. I?m actually very normal with my Pokemon, who were my only friends for many years. Now I am what I am, cold, feelingless ? againts humans that is, very peculiar, isn?t it ? but powerful. Oh, you?ll see tomorrow,? explained himself John and made a rare event happen! He smiled a tiny bit!
    ?That?s kind of sad. You didn?t go with anyone? I kind of spent all my journeys with friends,? compassionately said Ash.
    ?Pika, pikapika?? asked Pikachu.
    ?I think he?s approving what I said,? said Ash.
    ?My only friends were my Pokemon. I told you I was alone. No offense, but you do seem quite nosy, don?t you agree?? replied John, embarassing May and Ash. Brock was still silent.
    ?What Pokemon do You use?? asked Brock.
    ?I rely on my Espeon, but I also have Porygon2, Blaziken, Typhlosion, Metagross and Gardevoir,? replied John with no hesitation. He was apparently having fun teasing his opponent.
    ?You?re so sure of yourself, eh? Well, I?ll show you tomorrow what a real battle is like!? exclaimed Ash.
    ?Ash, I wouldn?t underestimate John. Being with Your Pokemon makes the bond between you and your Pokemon stronger, and makes the Pokemon stronger too. I?d watch out if I were you,? Brock told Ash.
    ?You are right. I shouldn?t be underestimated. The power of my Pokemon made me what I am today.?
    ?That means what??
    ?The Head of Team Rocket and the name of the most powerful Pokemon trainer! That?s why Prof. Oak wanted you to battle me! Don?t you understand yet?? John looked a bit irritated.
    ?Eh, yeah, I think I get it now,? whispered Ash who got scared of John.
    ?Good. Let us go then! Off to Agate!?
    John let his Espeon out of it?s Pokeball and John?s pride and Joy teleported the small group to a small building right beside Agate.
    ?This is where baby and small Pokemon have good care. Nurse Joy enjoys it and I do too,? still coldly said John.
    The garden of the building was fenced and a young Nurse Joy was sitting cross-legged with a bunch of baby Pokemon.
    ?Hello, how are my little friends doing?? asked John. He smiled.
    ?Very well!? answered the Nurse Joy.
    John let his Pokemon out of they?re Pokeballs and sat down with two Pichus.
    ?Pich-pichu!? said the Pichus, and they seemed really happy.
    The still-mysterious Head of Team Rocket petted the Pichus and laughed. He played around with them and invited his visitors to join in.
    The trio had great fun and totally forgot that John was so different such a short time ago.
    ?Just look at him. It?s peculiar. He?s so nice with Pokemon, but so odd with people. I wonder if it can be helped,? whispered May to Ash.
    Ash agreed with her and continued to play catch with Pikachu and a few Cleffas.
    ?Having fun? I sincerely hope so,? said John, in, what seemed peculiar, his cold voice.
    ?Yes, sure, you had a great idea to take us here! Too bad it?s getting dim,? excitedly replied Ash.
    ?Yes, but that?s that. Now, if we may, can we go to my headquarters? That?s where your rooms are prepared,? said John and just looked at Espeon who teleported the group to John?s, well, kind of house. It was a bit in place of the Shadow Pokemon Lab.
    John showed Ash, Brock and May to their rooms (which were large, comfortable guest rooms with nice furniture) and wished them goodnight.

    Part 2 ? Tower Colosseum Face-off

    John took Ash and company to the dining room where a nearly-ready breakfest lied on the table.
    ?Do sit down. I?ll finish making the breakfast,? said John.
    The person they met yesterday still kept on amazing them. He fried eggs and made all breakfast himself, for quite a lot of people, but they daren?t talk about it.
    The breakfast was delicious and a few minutes after finishing John?s Espeon performed another teleport, this time to the Tower Colosseum.
    Large crowds were seated and waving their arms and cheering. A special part had Prof. Oak, Ash?s mother and many of Ash?s friends in it. There was Misty too, and she cheered for Ash really loudly. Gary started cheering for John, but Prof. Oak hit him with his elbow.
    Laticia, the Rocket Executive asked May and Brock to go to the special area.
    ?Battle between the Team Rocket Head, John, and Ash Ketchum from Pallet Town. Six on six, let the battle commence!? said the voice speaker.
    Ash sent out Pikachu first. John chose Espeon.
    Each of Ash?s Pokemon was one-hit fainted by Espeon. Ash fell to his knees and faced down.
    ?Ash Ketchum from Pallet Town loses, Team Rocket Head John victorious!? said the voice speaker.
    John walked up to Ash (who was crying quietly because of the embarassement (the battle was live on TV)) and gave him his hand and helped Ash stand up.
    Prof. Oak, May, Misty, Brock and Jessie, James and Meowth run up to the two.
    They all cheered Ash up, but he was clearly unhappy.
    ?Am I weak?? he whispered.
    ?No, you?re not, the Head is just stronger than you! Don?t worry, you can?t even count the battles you won, with us for example!? said Jessie who really liked Team Rocket turning good.
    ?Yes, how many times did you send us blasting off? We lost count long, long ago!? confirmed Meowth.
    May and Misty both tried to hug Ash at the same moment and ended up fighting.
    ?Uh, can you stop? Do you really like me so much you?ll fight over me?? asked Ash, but the two didn?t stop fighting.
    ?This calls for Metagross,? John let Metagross out ?Metagross, stop these two from fighting!?
    ?Meta!? said Metagross and stood right next to the hair-pulling fighters and roared. The two stopped immediately.
    ?Thanks!? John put Metagross back in it?s Pokeball.

    Part 3 ? John Builds Up Tension

    At a tea in John?s ?house? May nad Misty were still to each other?s throats, and demanded from Ash a reply for a hard question (which one of them does he prefer), but John interrupted (Prof. Oak and Ash?s mother were not there).
    ?Look, Ash won?t reply, but I know what he?s thinking. Heh, heh, he broke the bike of his choice,? said John, who clearly had used his Espeon for this.
    ?He broke my bike!? replied Misty and May in unison.
    ?I know that. I?m just getting some tension here. So, will it be Misty, who always was angry at Ash, or the Contesting May?! To be continued!?
    May and Misty looked at each other and then looked back at John with excitement on their faces.
    ?So, what are the odds? Misty was always angry at Ash and sometimes nasty to him, while May is quite younger than Ash. Oh, isn?t this fun. Just no heart attacks please.?
    ?Why don?t you just say?!? yelled Misty.
    ?Okay, just don?t try to hit me. Yes, Ash missed that person quite a lot, yes, that?s it. Whoah, Espeon, please, I don?t want to see more of those dreams!?
    Misty jumped up in happiness and stuck her tongue out at May. May exited the room. Misty sat down on Ash?s lap (thank goodness Ash?s legs were strong from all the walking he did).
    ?Uh, John, You had to? Well, I mean, I?m not really eighteen yet, and,? started Ash, but an interruption stopped him from talking.
    ?You two look so cute together!? It was Ash?s mother.


    Yeah, I know 'John' isn't a very good name, but then again.
    Part four might appear.
    Any comments, likes, dislikes, pLease. If the ratings are good, part four will probably appear.
     
    Err... could you mind explaining why Team Rocket has now turned good... or better? A bit of background information wouldn't go amiss in a situation such as this one, Anyways: to review:

    ~The three parts you wrote could easily have been satisfied into just one. That way it would have been a lot longer, and a bit better.

    ~DESCRIPTION!!! Sorry, but I'm a description freak... you can never have too much description in a fic, and there was barely any, if not none in some situations. The battle went:

    Pikachu vs Espeon --> All died because of Espeon

    ~What on earth happened in between? Which Pokemon did he use? Why was his battle on TV? What makes Wes and Rui famous? There are a lot of questions unanswered with this, and they really should be sorted as background information... which there was none of (bar TR defeating Cipher)

    ~The way John described his Pokemon seemed as if he was reading a list. "I have......" You wouldn't do it real life? If anything, you'd show them to your opponent or something similar.

    This fic needs a LOT of improvement before you put up Part 4... and that's all I'm going to say for the time being.
     
    Thank You for Your comments. I shall get to fixing the story... and I'll write some kind of prologue.
    Ever played Colosseum? Wes and Rui are famous for all they did to Cipher.

    The battle was on TV because Ash had been considered a very powerful trainer by many, and Prof. Oak asked John if they could battle, and this was what people wanted - a giant battle between two great trainers.

    I meant by the short battle description to make an impact - Espeon did not make much effort to beat all six of Ash's Pokemon. And We have no idea what Pokemon will the Advanced series end with (in means of Ash's team).

    Little description? I'm trying to do something here. How would You imagine John without description? How does he look like in Your imagination?


    The Prologue:

    When the police had stopped Team Rocket, a few members went to jail, while the rest were offered something: the police planned to make Team Rocket a good organisation that would clean up Orre and protect it from criminals a bit. John was appointed the Head because lots of people attested his power. Team Rocket turned Pyrite into a beautiful town and got rid of Cipher. There are five Admins: Celia, Wes, Rui, Don and Cristina, who all run under Laticia, the Executive, and the only person higher in the hierachy is John.


    That's the prologue. Now, when John told Ash, Brock and May what Pokemon he has in his party, he tells them because he is sure that he will win and that's his way of teasing the opponent.
    That's that for now. Part 4 will be better, I promise. Really. More description, all that. That's were we get to know a TINY bit of John's past. Yeah.
     
    okay... that was... intresting... i guess. but i STILL cant imagine TR being good...
     
    Thanks.
    It's a completely different Team Rocket, mainly consisting now of normal people.
     
    *runs off, screaming* THE WORLD AS WE KNOW IT IS COMING TO AN END!!! T.ROCKET IS NOW GOOD!!! *runs into a pole* i`m okay!!! sorta... *faints*
     
    *muttering in sleep* no... go away... GAH!!! EVIL PINK BUNNIES ARE ATTCKING!!! *wakes up* wow, i spammed...
     
    That wasn't very, well, nice.
    Here are parts 4, 5 and 6!


    Part 4 ? The Breaking of The Ice

    After Ash and company left Orre, John went to Johto, to New Bark Town (actually to the areas of Tohjo Falls) to watch the stars. It was his favourite place to do that, because there was a good view of the sky and the sea was there too.
    Suddenly, he heard footsteps. He turned around and so did Espeon. A girl, about his age stopped when she saw the two.
    ?Are-are You J-John?? she asked quietly with disbelief.
    ?Yes.?
    ?I-I wanted to meet you, uh, I mean,? started the girl.
    The girl was very pretty and slim. Her hair was blue and it was in a weird shape. She wore a kind of small, white coat over a pink shirt, and blue and purple shorts. She still looked at John with disbelief. It seemed that she really wanted to meet him.
    But Espeon was faster than her. It ?probed? her mind and transferred many things to John.
    What did Espeon find? Many things, like a vision of the girls? room, which was filled with photos, pictures and drawings of John. But why? That question filled John?s head. Why?
    Espeon responded to that question. John was in shock. He felt odd. No-one had much need for him to live, except his fans (who cared about John?s Pokemon, not John), after his family died. But, this girl cared for him. Him. Not his Pokemon.
    At this moment, imaginary chunks of ice started falling off an imaginary heart. After a few seconds, the ice was gone.
    ?Well, do we plan to stand like this in silence?? asked John raising his eyebrow. He smiled and his voice wasn?t cold anymore.
    The girl smiled back. She had real luck.
    ?Well, why don?t you wait a few minutes here? I?ll be back in a moment!? said the girl and walked off a bit.
    John and Espeon observed her. She took her Pokegear and called someone. After a minute she came back.
    ?Well, then, would you like to come to my house for supper? I think my mother wants to meet you two and see if what they say about you is true,? said Marina. That was her name.
    ?Why not?? said John.
    The two headed off to New Bark Town and to Marina?s home. Marina rang the doorbell and her mother opened. They went inside and Marina?s mother was pretty much interested in John, but less in Espeon.
    ?They said you?re a cold and feelingless person! I think that was a lie,? said Marina?s mother. John didn?t respond to that because Marina wanted to show him her room.
    The room had posters, photos, drawings and other art of John. The computer on the desk was on and a website was showing: ?W&R John Fanclub?.
    ?Do you know what the W and R stand for?? asked John looking at the screen.
    ?Not really.?
    ?It stands for Wes and Rui. For example, that photo,? John pointed at a photo on the desk ?is clearly made from their office. I know they?ve been doing this, because I have cameras installed in the offices. They make money on that. They put ads on the site and it gets hundreds of visits a day. Good business,? explained John.
    ?Wes and Rui are Admins, aren?t they? That?s odd of them. Good idea with the cameras!?
    ?Thanks. I can see what each Admin is doing, so I know if they?re working or not. For example, did you know that Wes and Rui spend about an hour daily in their office flirting? Or that Celia desperately tries to find a date on the internet, but has been unsuccesful??
    ?Whoah, you know a lot!?
    ?Thanks.?
    Marina was now looking at John with a smile. John was smiling too. They were silent for two minutes and twenty-eight seconds.
    ?Supper is ready!? called Marina?s mother from downstairs.
    The supper consisted of Ditto Jelly with whipped cream and Pecha berries. John liked the supper and Espeon received a bar of chocolate, his favourite food. Marina?s mother seemed to be very happy about something.
    John?s thought were at Marina. He started to like her a lot. He thought about what Espeon discovered earlier on.
    When he had to go, he asked if he should come tomorrow.
    ?Sure!?

    Part 5 ? Jealousy

    ?Marina, I think you have your new friend waiting for you outside.?
    ?Is it John??
    ?Yes. He?s standing a few meters away from the door.?
    Marina went out and greeted her new ?friend?.
    ?Do You want to go somewhere? Espeon can teleport us,? asked John.
    ?I always wished to go to the Sevii Islands, but that is kind of stupid.?
    ?It?s not.?
    Espeon teleported the two and itself to One Island.
    ?Wow!? exclaimed Marina ?But I don?t have my swimming costume with me.?
    ?Which one??
    ?Uh, the red one??
    Suddenly the costume appeared levitating in front of Marina.
    ?While you get changed, I?ll go see Celio.?
    Celio?s Network Machine was perfectly well and Marina and John met after a few minutes.
    John complemented Marina as they went to a beach.
    ?Aren?t you too warm? I mean, you?re trousers are long,? said Marina with a kind of worried look on her face.
    ?My clothes are made of a synthetic material that lets air through. I?m all right.?
    After half an hour on the beach, someone interrupted their fun time.
    ?Hey, what are you doing with my girlfriend?!? screamed Junichi.
    ?Shut up, Junichi! I can do what I want! And I?m not your girlfriend, anyway. You?re pathetic! Go away!? Marina yelled to Junichi.
    ?You?d better do what she says,? said John, with his trademark eyebrow raising.
    ?Or what?? was the reply.
    ?Or I?ll have you running away.?
    ?Yeah, sure!?
    John let Metagross out of it?s Pokeball. Junichi didn?t like the look of this.
    ?Metagross, that guy is irritating,? John said, pointing at Junichi.
    Metagross walked up to Junichi and roared. Junichi shrieked and ran away.
    ?Good job Metagross.?
    John petted Metagross and returned it to it?s Pokeball.
    Espeon transferred a bit of John?s feelings to Marina?s mind without John?s knowledge. Marina smiled.
    ?Where were we? Ah, yes, we?ll go to Berry Forest a bit later,? started John, but Marina touched his lips.

    Part 6 ? Return To Orre

    ?A picture like that would bring lots of fans of mine to your site, wouldn?t it?? John said, facing the door to Wes and Rui?s office. Marina and Espeon were standing next to him.
    There was no answer for a few seconds, then Wes came out.
    ?How do you know about the site?!? asked Wes.
    ?Look, I know many things, like your and Rui?s daily average of flirting. I counted that!?
    ?Oi!? sounded Rui hearing what John said.
    John laughed and walked on. Marina and Espeon followed. Celia came to greet them.
    ?Why can?t I ever get a date? Look, you?ve got someone here while I?m still alone? Why?!?
    ?Look, Celia, you need to have some kind of personality that people like. Work on it.?
    Don emerged from the door to his and Cristina?s office.
    ?Morning!? Don turned to Cristina ?You won?t guess. It looks like the rumours on W&R are true! John is being followed by a blue-haired girl!?
    John, Marina and Espeon just kept on walking to John?s office and went in.
    ?Don?t worry about them. Celia is jealous and the others are amazed. Ah, well, as if I were ugly,? said John, laughing a bit.
    ?No, you?re not ugly, you?re pretty handsome.?
    Espeon turned away from what happened next (Espeon decided the the two might need some privacy) and sat down on John?s chair, then switched the Camera Mode on the computer. Wes and Rui were flirting and making stuff for their website at the same time.
    Espeon sighed.

    THE END
     
    that was... still intresting... but i liked it. it was creative, thats for sure!!!^^

    and sorry about spamming.... *smacks face*
     
    Thanks.
    And I'm not telling You what happened next! Maybe in another fanfic?
     
    That was a very good story. Liked the way you ended it. But, a bit mroe description on the battle would have helped... a lot. I know the main elemnt of the story wasn't the battles but I still think you overpowered espeon. But, all in all a good story.
     
    Thanks!
    No, Espeon isn't overpowered, it's a part of the story. Besides, 'As Cold As Ice' faces a new fanfic, 'Present', which is basically a better version. It doesn't feature a battle - but it features Ash and Misty's wedding...
    Oh, KARR, be quiet!
    And please don't start about the ages. Please.
     
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