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dedicated to pikawolf... everyone rate!

darkblastoise89

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    kelsey,
    if i let you tell it,
    then i'm perfect,
    but i know otherwise.
    the only thingz i've ever known
    are corruption and lies.
    when i first met you,
    i still didn't realize,
    but the way you got me open
    has me soaring to the sky.

    in truth,
    i adore you,
    i could never ignore you
    my love is only for you,
    i'd take a bullet just to show you.
    when you cry i'll console you, and
    when you're sad i'll hold you
    and even if you turned on me,
    i could never scold you...​

    honestly it's more of a rap but the message is still the same.
     
    aww thats sweet = ). I could tell this was from the heart(yeah i know its a cliche lol) but yeah, a beautiful piece in its own respect.

    The only thing that disrupted me was that more than half the lines in the second stanza ended with "you" and it seemed kind of awkward. = )
     
    yah thanx fl, well you know rap has a lot of repitition of at least one word. thanks all the same.
     
    darkblastoise89 said:
    yah thanx fl, well you know rap has a lot of repitition of at least one word. thanks all the same.
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    oh lol I didn't see the part about it being a rap. 0_0 yeah I'm the wrong guy to ask about how rap works....
     
    I said I'd rate you're poem and here it is!!! That's really sweet, I reckon Pikawolf loves it!!! 10/10
     
    Matty!!!!!!! That is soooooooooooooooo cuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuute! *blushes* I am so honored that you dedicated your poem to me. ^_^ Yeah, the first time I read it, I thought it was more of a rap than a poem-poem. ^_~ I likez it lots! 10/10

    ~Kelsey *huggles*
     
    it is but it's all the same thing to me honestly, because *most* of my poems (with a beat of course) can be said as raps
     
    aww Im such a sap for romance, brings a tear to my eye. ;)
     
    lol i don't cry. if i do it's out of anger ot hatred, but i've alwayz said to myself that i am weak if i cry so i supress it. i must be strong for my friends!
     
    I get teary eyed when I read something beautiful or sad. I got emotional when I read night and at the end of "of mice and men" lol.
     
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