Hoenn Myth

ash_misty4ever

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    I created this for my school, and I decided to share it on PC!

    notice: I don't own Pokemon blah blah blah


    Mew, the most powerful god of all the Pokemon gods, created earth. His first Pokemon creations were Moltres, a fire blazing bird, Articuno, an ice blue bird, and Zapdos, an electric bird. They were better known as the legendary birds. Mew had great plans for earth, different environments, great tasting foods, the whole package. He felt that everything would be fabulous.
    Mew sent the legendary birds to Kanto, the first country. There, they could survive in whatever environment they wanted. Moltres chose a volcanic environment, or Cinnabar Island. Articuno chose a snowy habitat, or Seafoam Island. Zapdos chose Vermilion City. Every Pokemon was so pleased with their new home, that Mew created another country called Johto.
    With a new country, there would need to be more Pokemon. Mew wanted to construct dog like Pokemon this time. Suicune, a mist dog, Entei, a fire dog, and Raikou, an electric dog, were formed. Again, the Pokemon loved their home so much that Mew wanted to create yet another country, Hoenn.
    This time, Mew produced only two flying Pokemon Latias, and Latios. Both were the wisest of the Legendary Pokemon. Latios was the older brother to Latias, his sister. They lived together, played together, and were the best of friends. Mew wanted all of his creations to act just like Latias and Latios. But unfortunately, they didn?t.
    Zapdos, Articuno, and Moltres didn?t take care of the Pokemon, instead them bullied them, demanding gifts. Suicune, Entei, and Raikou didn?t either, they patrolled the area, making sure no Pokemon could escape. They hoarded them into small areas and neglected the innocent Pokemon. Latias and Latios took care of their Pokemon. When a Pokemon fell down, Latias would help them up. They fed the Pokemon, and were good friends with them too!
    Suddenly, the legendary birds wanted more power, so they tried to take over Johto. They fought with the legendary dogs, destroying most of the land. Mew hurriedly sent Latias and Latios to Johto so they could settle the conflict.
    Latias and Latios tried to, but unfortunately, they failed. All of the Pokemon watched as this horrid battle continued. Suddenly the fight got so worse, Latios had to stop it. He and Latias rushed in between the Pokemon, trying to stop the fighting, but an attack struck them. Latias and Latios wounds were fatal, actually killing the poor Pokemon. The other Pokemon quit fighting, and mourned over their lost friends.
    Then, two orbs appeared, floating in the air. One was blue, another red. Suddenly, they fell into the ocean. Once the orbs hit the salty water, two human shapes appeared. As they took form, their faces looked exactly like Latias and Latios.
    These humans were a reminder that Latias and Latios would always be remembered. The Humans took care of the Pokemon, trained them, and eventually became tuned to what their feelings were. Latias and Latios are loved because of there bravery, knowledge, and courage. Their act will always be remembered. Today, Latias and Latios are known as the Guardians Of Hoenn
     
    Hmm... interesting story on the legends, ash_misty4ever. Very different for the people who know the real storyline, but it's good anyway. It should be longer though.




    (Sorry, but I still can't stare at your avatar pic!)
     
    Yeah... I had to end the story really quickly. My project was due today and I typed it yesterday :paranoid:
     
    Well, I can account that the fact you typed it up quickly, and for that reason - it's OK. If you were to do a rehash though, there are a few things that I coukd give advice for:

    1) The description was virtually non-existant. I could picture the Pokemon, but some people coming to the site who haven't even heard of Poekmon migth check this out and not know what you're on about. I'll give you an example of something you said, and try and make it better.

    ash_misty4ever said:
    His first Pokemon creations were Moltres, a fire blazing bird, Articuno, an ice blue bird, and Zapdos, an electric bird.

    Instead, this could become:

    Mew's first creations were three legendary birds. The first was a bird whose wings were blazing with fire. Orange fur and feathers surrounded its strong skeleton to bring a sense of fierceness and authority. Mew named it motres, after the molten magma surrounding its wings. The second one was a bird whose body was jagged and coarse in places. From its yellow wings came electrical surges that filled the sky with power. Mew named it Zapdos, from those srges that came from the wings. The final one was a bird who was surrounded with an aura of misty mystery. It had azure shimmering feathers that glaced its wings, making it seem beautiful than it really was. Mew named it Articuno, for the cold temperatures which it brought on when it drew near.

    Well, it's not great, but it's the best I can come up with the five minutes. Apart from the lagging description (which would have improved the length is you 'd have got it right), the plot is top-notch. Pity this is only a short (I'm assuming it is), as I would have liked to see it continue.
     
    Well it's pretty good for a begginer.

    Well the master here knows all.I could do better than that but I don't expect you to do the same.It takes a while to master these things.
     
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    Thanks for the tips guys! I really should of added a lot of deatil and made it longer! Sorry I couldn't make it to the best of my ability. I'm working on an AAML fanfic that I have been working on for a while, so I'll take your advice and work harder!!! :classic:
     
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