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- Seen Sep 20, 2011
The journal is rather interesting but it shows some errors.
For one, It lacks punctuation D: (poor periods)!
I think it's kinda weird that every sentence has very little structure to it, I don't see a plot here anytime soon.
Although I could be wrong because some journal entry I read in the past reflects on modern world. I would think a Pokemon type journal entry would come around soon (not that I think Pokemon COULD reflect...but it could show those what-cha-call-it think at the end of Aesop fables...I don't know something like that).
The story itself really throws me off. I'm saying this because when I first saw it, I was confused whether it was a story or a poem. I can't see the veins within the writing.
Overall the story is competent, not too good, not too bad.
Hope this review help.
For one, It lacks punctuation D: (poor periods)!
I think it's kinda weird that every sentence has very little structure to it, I don't see a plot here anytime soon.
Although I could be wrong because some journal entry I read in the past reflects on modern world. I would think a Pokemon type journal entry would come around soon (not that I think Pokemon COULD reflect...but it could show those what-cha-call-it think at the end of Aesop fables...I don't know something like that).
The story itself really throws me off. I'm saying this because when I first saw it, I was confused whether it was a story or a poem. I can't see the veins within the writing.
Overall the story is competent, not too good, not too bad.
Hope this review help.