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Hi! I'm new, and this is my first story on the community. I don't mind criticism at all, so feel free to correct me when you have the spare time.
Also, the reason why it's twelve and up is because it has blood and violence...and adding that it's a horror novel.
Also, the reason why it's twelve and up is because it has blood and violence...and adding that it's a horror novel.
Prelude:
The Forgotten Hour
The Forgotten Hour
THE CLOCK struck midnight. All of the people dissolved into bloody sands. The man that stood was not alone, for there stood straightly a boy at least the age of thirteen.
The man started to run. The boy (who was named Alex Gates) kept on the man's trail as he caught up with him at amazing speed.
But soon he lost him in a dark alleyway. Their footsteps echoed, so he could keep track, but it was surely too hard to see. The Forgotten Hour wasn't going to be over until 1:00A.M. came.
And ever so suddenly, Alex's chest lurched backward, and so did his body. The man's fist had collided with his chest.
When he hit his head on the pavement, he immediately stood, but blood poured from his neck. Ignoring his dizziness, he kept following the man.
Alex knew the man created the Forgotten Hour. He had to capture him so he couldn't make the people dissolve every midnight.
His jacket caught on something--a nail, and it ripped. Cursing under his breath, he continued the trail on the man.
"Leave me alone!" snapped the man so loud, Alex knew where he was heading. Now Alex gained speed.
Alex's hand grasped the man's hand. He lurched his arm backward, making the man topple onto the ground like a dead fish. But the man came back quickly with a painful kick...somewhere.
Alex punched the man across the face. Suddenly, the man started sinking into the ground, straight down to the devil's territory.
And then Alex knew. The man was Satan. He was making all of this happen. The Forgotten Hour...and all of the clues leading to him. He was definitely the devil.
"I'll see you in one thousand years!" Satan yelled, and disappeared under the ground. All of the people came back to life as the sand of blood rose and transformed into people once more.
"I could have you arrested for being out this late!" a police officer yelled to Alex. He started running, toward his house, dodging the police officer's handcuffs.
The man started to run. The boy (who was named Alex Gates) kept on the man's trail as he caught up with him at amazing speed.
But soon he lost him in a dark alleyway. Their footsteps echoed, so he could keep track, but it was surely too hard to see. The Forgotten Hour wasn't going to be over until 1:00A.M. came.
And ever so suddenly, Alex's chest lurched backward, and so did his body. The man's fist had collided with his chest.
When he hit his head on the pavement, he immediately stood, but blood poured from his neck. Ignoring his dizziness, he kept following the man.
Alex knew the man created the Forgotten Hour. He had to capture him so he couldn't make the people dissolve every midnight.
His jacket caught on something--a nail, and it ripped. Cursing under his breath, he continued the trail on the man.
"Leave me alone!" snapped the man so loud, Alex knew where he was heading. Now Alex gained speed.
Alex's hand grasped the man's hand. He lurched his arm backward, making the man topple onto the ground like a dead fish. But the man came back quickly with a painful kick...somewhere.
Alex punched the man across the face. Suddenly, the man started sinking into the ground, straight down to the devil's territory.
And then Alex knew. The man was Satan. He was making all of this happen. The Forgotten Hour...and all of the clues leading to him. He was definitely the devil.
"I'll see you in one thousand years!" Satan yelled, and disappeared under the ground. All of the people came back to life as the sand of blood rose and transformed into people once more.
"I could have you arrested for being out this late!" a police officer yelled to Alex. He started running, toward his house, dodging the police officer's handcuffs.
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Hope you like it! :D