Old Treecko's Forest

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    Old Treecko's Forest Part 1: History Lesson



    Old Treecko leaned back on the tree he used to sleep on. He had gotten quite good at sleep-standing. He was- in fact- a very old Treecko. But for some strange reason, he was still alive and able to battle like his grandsons. He wasn't really sleeping- just "resting his eyes." All old members of Old Treecko's Forest did this- he felt obligated to do it, too.
    "Grandpa, will you tell us another story of the old days?" This voice was high-pitched and childlike. Old Treecko would recognize this voice anywhere- Tara, his only granddaughter. He opened one eye to see the child's sparkling yellow eyes. Beside her were her friends... What were their names now? Old Treecko thought surveying the Sentret, Cleffa, and Eevee pleading in the same way. They always did that.
    "So, Tara," he wheezed in his husky voice, "You want to know more about your old Grandpa, eh?"
    "Please, Mr. Guardian!" the Cleffa exclaimed, brimming with joy and happiness.
    "Fine then," he wheezed, sitting down slowly.
    "When your grandfather was just a little shaver, he grew up in dark times. Dark times indeed. Gengar came and went like dust storms in the desert. Our militia really didn't work that well."
    "Excuse me, sir," the Sentret interrupted politely, "But what's a militia?"
    "A militia is sort of like an army," the Eevee answered knowingly. "Can we go on with our story now?"
    Old Treecko smiled and continued, "My mother would always tell me scary stories- ones you wouldn't want to hear- to scare me. Gengar are truly evil Pokemon.
    "When I grew older, the number of Gengar decreased a bit, but swarms of Yanma appeared to eat our berries and leaves. Many of our people died of hunger in this time. My mother was one of them." Old Treecko bowed his head. Tara lowered hers a little to show respect to her great-grandmother.
    "I was taken to be part of the militia where I would train and evolve. Such a distasteful thing... But time went on in the militia's training plan, and I grew stronger. Every person who confronted me was sent home crying," The girl Pokemon let out squeals of amazement. Tara's grandfather was the strongest Pokemon in the forest!
    "Grandpa, what happened after the militia took a Gengar attack?" Tara asked. She had heard bits and pieces, and this was her favorite story.
    "You like that part, don't you?" Old Treecko asked, and continued with the story. "Many Pokemon thought less of me because I was unevolved. They thought that my body was for a child. But one day, I would prove them wrong. A ghost of Gengars attacked the militia base, and we were forced to fight without weaponry or protection. Many Pokemon did not survive- again I say this. The only other ones who survived were old, experienced, and on their last year with the militia. The next year, the militia was gone. No more fighting. The Gengar would win."
    "But they didn't, right?" the Cleffa asked, a tad spooked by the story.
    "Of course not!" Old Treecko laughed. "Because as soon as the Gengar invaded your grandmother's home, I rose to power with a new light in me! I defeated every invader with time to kiss her a few times!"
    "Grandpa, please skip the mushy stuff!" Tara whined. This was her least favorite part.
    "That's when I became guardian. Or at least I named myself "The Guardian" to raise everyone's hopes about the war against the Gengar. No one bought it, though, until I won the Battle of Bleak Lake single-handedly. That was when they named me the actual "Great Protector" for my life."
    "Grandpa, are there still Gengar around today?" Tara asked.
    "Of course," the Eevee replied. "But your grandfather does such a good job, chances are you'll never see one."
    "Oh yeah?" a dark and menacing voice asked.
     
    i liked it. you used a bit to much dialogue i think
     
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    Old Treecko's Forest Part 2: Encounters


    Old Treecko was very good at recognising. He was even better at remembering. And the voice he had just heard was something he'd hoped in all his dreams his grandchildren- and friends- would see. Old Treecko gasped at the large, purple-ish figure towering above him and laughing menacingly. Kiba. Fang. He was known as fang for his eyes- they pierced his opponents harder than any Gengar's eyes in history, and he was forced to surrender.​
    "Yes, old man," he laughed, looking straight into his eyes. "I am back, and this is my forest." He pushed Old Treecko down with his foot, and buried his head in the ground.​
    "This is not your forest any more than it was thirty years ago..." Old Treecko grunted with all the strength he had.​
    The young Pokemon wanted to scream, to run away, but the Eevee held them back with her overly large paws. She shushed them, and told all but the Cleffa to sneak away for help. Cleffa was part of the clever Eevee's plan. It was just a matter of time before that Cleffa would summon up a powerful move from the back of her mind, and destroy the ghosts. And the Ghosts couldn't hurt them- they were immune.​
    The Cleffa waggled her fingers in hopes of a great attack- just not Hyper Beam. On the first try- Harden. With an occasional "Keep going!" from the Eevee, the Cleffa had used many power-up moves like Agility and Howl. On her fifteenth try, she summoned a light tingling feeling- something that she knew the Old Venasaur down the block used to get when he was angry. While the Eevee hissed at her to try again, she sat frozen to her spot, not daring to move. Put out your hands, whispered a voice inside her. She did. Taking a step back, she felt the tingling sensation all over her body now. She felt the warm sun on her back, and the coolness of the Ghost Pokemon. With a loud yell of confidence, she released the Sun's energy right at Kiba, closing her eyes because of the blinding sunlight.​
    "What the..." Kiba couldn't finish his sentence, for he was blown away with the Solarbeam. With a loud "I SHALL RETURN! YOU KNOW I WILL!" the Gengar floated away like a baloon.​
    "Children," Old Treecko turned to face them. "Follow me. All of you." He picked up a now exhausted Cleffa, and motioned for Eevee and the others just returning with no one to follow. This was one of the most serious things in all of Old Treecko's life.​
     
    This was better than the first part. This had not a lot of the dialogue which is good. This piece is now to me 'short but sweet'.

    Keep writing
     
    Old Treecko's Forest Part 3: We must prepare
    In what looked like a Principal's office, the Gengar called Kiba growled. He rubbed his head as if it hurt, and with the occasional smack on the face, he got even angrier. Spinning madly around him was a sort of Ghost-Ball Pokemon- Ghastly. They had been talking for quite some time about Metronome, and the possibility they'd be beaten by a baby again was very slim, and that Old Treecko had trained the little monsters, and how the stupid Ghastly wouldn't shut up.
    "You know, Dibbs, Old Treecko is powerful," he thought out loud.
    "Yes, Sir." the Ghastly replied, not stopping from spinning.
    Dibbs wasn't paying attention, though. He was thinking about how he'd actually become Kiba's right hand man instead of a henchman. This was when he would evolve... However he'd do that, he wasn't sure.
    "It's clear!" Kiba suddenly shouted. "The old man's willow tree!"
    ***​
    "I'm truly disappointed in you!" Tara's father's stern voice cut through everyone like a knife- even Old Treecko was spooked. They were in Old Treecko's willow tree- his home in the heart of the woods. Tara's father had rushed right over when- by Murkrow Mail- he had heard of Cleffa's amazing triumph. Of course, that was not what he thought of. His main concern was of his daughter's safety.
    All of the children sank in their leaf chairs, afraid of a punishment. You see, Old Treecko was famous for his strength. His son was famous for his punishments. His granddaughter was known for her beautiful eyes. They moved their eyes from one another, trying to reassure each other. Of course, this didn't help anyone- especially the Sentret.
    When Tara's grandmother brought in cookies, the smell cheered the Pokemon up. They each grabbed a handful, and munched on them quietly.
    "It would have been better to lose your grandfather than yourself!" Tara's father said calmly. This was part true, and part joke- for he smiled when Old Treecko tried to hit him. The Pokemon giggled happily, then sank again when they saw the father's face.
    But it was no time for punishment. Where there was Kiba, there was a whole army of ghosts. We must prepare, Old Treecko thought.
    ***​
    A few days later, Old Treecko leaned on his willow tree, chewing on a stick. He waited for Tara and her friends to come. They would have to enlist in the militia; they were definately old- and brave- enough. But the Sentret- Old Treecko learned her name was Sunny- didn't show. She was too scared, and he couldn't make her do anything. But Tara, the Eevee(Jenna), and the Cleffa(Crela) came. And they fought like girls, for they were, in fact, girls.
     
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