EkaSwede
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Well, forumers, I'm a little nervous posting this, considering that the first PMD is rather old. But hey, I hope it will be enjoyable for you.
EDIT: Seeing as I actually have the first 34 chapters already written, I try to post them up as quick as possible. After all, for some inexplicible reason, it's harder to find a mistake in Words than it is in forum posting, so I constantly check for inconsistencies.
EDIT2: Deepest apologies for suddenly disappearing like a confident moron...
I would also, like a lot of you, appreciate constructive criticism about this average fiction.
Obligatory disclaimer: I don't own Pokémon in any way; this is but a generic piece of fiction.
Genre: General/Humour/Friendship
Rating: T (although rather insecure about it)
Summary: A kleptomaniac Charmander and a Machop with speech impediments are forced to form a Rescue Team so they can pay off a debt. A slightlty different take on the game.
It all begun with a boy who had a dream, a dream in which he could be a known individual. He was known as playful at most times, yet very foolhardy. He imagined a lot of being another being, a being with strength superior to human.
However…
In another world, something terrible was about to happen. This event, an event that would bring mass destruction and devastation, was to be hindered by a certain someone.
An intervention had to occur to stop this foreseen destruction. This intervention would consist of a brave boy with many playful, innocent imaginations. This boy would undertake a quest to hinder this terrible event.
But something went wrong before the metamorphosis… something very, very wrong…
A Pokémon which had been sleeping against a tree slowly woke up. It sat up groggily and shook its head as if to remain consciousness faster. It felt a beating pain on its forehead as it put its grey hand on it.
"Grey?'" it thought slowly. It put its hand down on the grassy ground and looked at itself. Its entire body was grey, and it could see the ribs on its chest. It wiggled its toeless feet curiously, wondering why it had them.
"Finally awake, eh?" a voice called, "took you long enough."
It almost jumped to its feet in surprise, but it only resulted falling down on its rear end again. It looked at the direction from where the voice had come from. An orange lizard looked at it with curious blue eyes. It was about to freak out when it noticed something terrible.
"L-l-l-look out, Orange lizard thing!" it shouted, pointing at the lizard's tail, "Tail yours on fire is!"
The orange Pokémon peeked at its tail and shrugged. It then looked back at the sitting Pokémon oddly.
"You know, Machop, it's supposed to. If a Charmander's flame is put out, they die," said the Charmander, revealing both species of the Pokémon.
"Charomandor?" asked the Machop, not having heard that in its life. Charmander stomped forward once, its tail flaring up. Machop, however, didn't show any sign of fear.
"No, Char-Man-Der, dense-head!" it snapped.
"…eh… what?" Machop carefully asked, feeling a little uneasy.
Charmander sighed, putting one of its paws on its chin, tilting its head. "Oh, brother…"
"You brother mine are?" Machop then asked hopefully with a smile, only receiving a glare from Charmander.
"First off, I'm a girl! Secondly, speak clearly, since it's hard to understand what you say! Jeez!" she spat, letting loose of a puff of smoke. Machop just continued smiling.
"Then Orange lizard my girl-brother is?" Charmander was now close to popping a vein. She was clenching one of her paws hard enough to hear some cracks in the knuckles. "Why angry Orange lizard be? Be you troubled?"
"YES!" Charmander shouted right at the Pokémon as she punched the tree it was sitting by. Once again, Machop wasn't even fazed and continued to stare into Charmander's eyes with the same curious expression. "IT'S YOU! WHAT'S THE MATTER WITH YOU?" she shouted again at it.
"Me not know where me is…" Machop muttered, finally looking down. "Me not know what me is."
Charmander looked at him, unable to say anything at first. She wondered if this Pokémon had strayed to far from home. But then, Fighting Pokémon where Fighting Pokémon: All brawls and no brain.
"Well, you're a Machop, and you're just outside Tiny Woods," she shortly answered, receiving a confused look from Machop. "Oh… not again," she muttered.
"What a Machop?" it asked curiously, smiling again. Charmander smacked her head with her paw in exasperation.
"Come here, there is a stream where you can see your reflection," she beckoned. Seeing as Machop just stared at her blankly, she sighed and grabbed a hold of its arms and pulled it up. "You're heavy," she stated. Machop glanced up at the sky and smiled goofily while he was dragged by the fire lizard.
When they came up to the stream, Machop's eyes lit up.
"Water, yay! Me thirsty!" it exclaimed jollily as it ran ahead of Charmander. She fortunately let go of the happy Pokémon and watched it jump in the water. The water splashed enough to make Charmander back off so she wouldn't get any water over her.
But Machop didn't resurface. Worried, Charmander ran to the water's edge to see if Machop was under the surface.
"Peek-a-boo!" it shouted as it suddenly popped out from the surface, as happy as ever. It guffawed when it saw Charmander jump back in sudden fright. Fortunately for Machop, the water level wasn't high where he was, which allowed him to pull the little prank. "Fun!" it shouted as it began drinking the fresh water.
When it was done it walked out of the water, and shook of the remaining water like a dog. "Much fun!" it added with a laugh. Charmander grew even more annoyed.
"Gah! Stop it! It's cold!" she yelled, cowering from the water droplets being flung at her. Machop turned to look at her. It tilted its head and raised an eyebrow (or whatever they have resembling eyebrows).
"Orange lizard… is small," it stated, now that it was standing up fully. She grumbled a little but then urged it to look in the stream. Machop stared blankly before getting down on all fours, looking in the river.
It looked in it for a while before it smiled. "Hello," it happily greeted. Charmander looked at the Pokémon oddly and walked up to it.
"That's you, Machop," she simply said. Machop looked at her and shook its head.
"No, no, silly lizard. Me is me, and he is he!" Machop looked back into the stream, and saw a greyish face with three disc like thingies on the top of its head. It also saw a pair of dark red eyes in the reflection, filled with joy.
"He is he?" inquired Charmander. "You mean that you're a guy?" Machop nodded. "Why didn't you say so?" she then asked him angrily.
"Silly lizard ask me not," he replied, still looking at his reflection.
She clenched her paws, having had enough being called lizard. "I have a name you know!" she snarled. Machop smiled and stood up, looking at her with the fearless, innocent eyes. That almost made her even angrier, why couldn't the darn creature get scared?
"My name's Flash," she said, mumbling cuss words under her breath.
"Good name," replied Machop. He rubbed his chin. "Me not have name, me forget." He hung his head sadly, showing that expression for once. "Me think it was something with L… L..."
The Charmander looked at the Machop with a little pity and cautiously walked up to him to comfort him. "Don't be sad, I can come up with a new name for you."
Machop lit up again. "Will you?" Flash nodded eagerly.
"Uh-huh, what about… hmm… Loopy?" she suggested. Machop smiled, but was confused.
"What Loopy mean?"
Flash scratched her head with her small claws. "Well, it means happy, yet funny, I think."
"Loopy?" he said to himself slowly. "Loopy…" Suddenly he started laughing out loud as he quickly stepped up to Flash, catching her in a tight hug. He lifted her up and danced around with her, still laughing.
"Oof! Down, Loopy, DOWN!" she yelled while she was being squeezed by the stronger Machop.
He immediately let go, still smiling. "Apologise, me too strong sometimes," he said lowly, flexing his arms a little.
"My ribs," muttered Flash, regaining her breath. "No more hugging, Loopy."
"Will try to not, but will forget," he replied obediently. She chuckled, despite the ache in her lungs after the hug. But this moment wouldn't go peacefully on though.
"THERE SHE IS!" one Pokémon yelled from a distance. It seemed like an angry looking pinkish dog.
"AFTER THE THIEF!" another one added. That one was much larger than the other, and was brownish.
Flash looked at Loopy and then suddenly darted off. The two chasing Pokémon soon ran by him, ignoring him completely. When he looked as the chasing Pokémon ran after Flash, he had seen that the big brown one was carrying a small Pokémon in its pouch.
And there he sat, completely clueless of what to. Why did Flash run away? What was a thief? And why was he just standing there?
"LOOPY!" he heard Flash call. Not having anything to do, he ran to where he heard the voice.
To be continued…
EDIT: Seeing as I actually have the first 34 chapters already written, I try to post them up as quick as possible. After all, for some inexplicible reason, it's harder to find a mistake in Words than it is in forum posting, so I constantly check for inconsistencies.
EDIT2: Deepest apologies for suddenly disappearing like a confident moron...
I would also, like a lot of you, appreciate constructive criticism about this average fiction.
Obligatory disclaimer: I don't own Pokémon in any way; this is but a generic piece of fiction.
Genre: General/Humour/Friendship
Rating: T (although rather insecure about it)
Summary: A kleptomaniac Charmander and a Machop with speech impediments are forced to form a Rescue Team so they can pay off a debt. A slightlty different take on the game.
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(Generic prologue)
It all begun with a boy who had a dream, a dream in which he could be a known individual. He was known as playful at most times, yet very foolhardy. He imagined a lot of being another being, a being with strength superior to human.
However…
In another world, something terrible was about to happen. This event, an event that would bring mass destruction and devastation, was to be hindered by a certain someone.
An intervention had to occur to stop this foreseen destruction. This intervention would consist of a brave boy with many playful, innocent imaginations. This boy would undertake a quest to hinder this terrible event.
But something went wrong before the metamorphosis… something very, very wrong…
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"Chapter I: Be you my friend?"
A Pokémon which had been sleeping against a tree slowly woke up. It sat up groggily and shook its head as if to remain consciousness faster. It felt a beating pain on its forehead as it put its grey hand on it.
"Grey?'" it thought slowly. It put its hand down on the grassy ground and looked at itself. Its entire body was grey, and it could see the ribs on its chest. It wiggled its toeless feet curiously, wondering why it had them.
"Finally awake, eh?" a voice called, "took you long enough."
It almost jumped to its feet in surprise, but it only resulted falling down on its rear end again. It looked at the direction from where the voice had come from. An orange lizard looked at it with curious blue eyes. It was about to freak out when it noticed something terrible.
"L-l-l-look out, Orange lizard thing!" it shouted, pointing at the lizard's tail, "Tail yours on fire is!"
The orange Pokémon peeked at its tail and shrugged. It then looked back at the sitting Pokémon oddly.
"You know, Machop, it's supposed to. If a Charmander's flame is put out, they die," said the Charmander, revealing both species of the Pokémon.
"Charomandor?" asked the Machop, not having heard that in its life. Charmander stomped forward once, its tail flaring up. Machop, however, didn't show any sign of fear.
"No, Char-Man-Der, dense-head!" it snapped.
"…eh… what?" Machop carefully asked, feeling a little uneasy.
Charmander sighed, putting one of its paws on its chin, tilting its head. "Oh, brother…"
"You brother mine are?" Machop then asked hopefully with a smile, only receiving a glare from Charmander.
"First off, I'm a girl! Secondly, speak clearly, since it's hard to understand what you say! Jeez!" she spat, letting loose of a puff of smoke. Machop just continued smiling.
"Then Orange lizard my girl-brother is?" Charmander was now close to popping a vein. She was clenching one of her paws hard enough to hear some cracks in the knuckles. "Why angry Orange lizard be? Be you troubled?"
"YES!" Charmander shouted right at the Pokémon as she punched the tree it was sitting by. Once again, Machop wasn't even fazed and continued to stare into Charmander's eyes with the same curious expression. "IT'S YOU! WHAT'S THE MATTER WITH YOU?" she shouted again at it.
"Me not know where me is…" Machop muttered, finally looking down. "Me not know what me is."
Charmander looked at him, unable to say anything at first. She wondered if this Pokémon had strayed to far from home. But then, Fighting Pokémon where Fighting Pokémon: All brawls and no brain.
"Well, you're a Machop, and you're just outside Tiny Woods," she shortly answered, receiving a confused look from Machop. "Oh… not again," she muttered.
"What a Machop?" it asked curiously, smiling again. Charmander smacked her head with her paw in exasperation.
"Come here, there is a stream where you can see your reflection," she beckoned. Seeing as Machop just stared at her blankly, she sighed and grabbed a hold of its arms and pulled it up. "You're heavy," she stated. Machop glanced up at the sky and smiled goofily while he was dragged by the fire lizard.
When they came up to the stream, Machop's eyes lit up.
"Water, yay! Me thirsty!" it exclaimed jollily as it ran ahead of Charmander. She fortunately let go of the happy Pokémon and watched it jump in the water. The water splashed enough to make Charmander back off so she wouldn't get any water over her.
But Machop didn't resurface. Worried, Charmander ran to the water's edge to see if Machop was under the surface.
"Peek-a-boo!" it shouted as it suddenly popped out from the surface, as happy as ever. It guffawed when it saw Charmander jump back in sudden fright. Fortunately for Machop, the water level wasn't high where he was, which allowed him to pull the little prank. "Fun!" it shouted as it began drinking the fresh water.
When it was done it walked out of the water, and shook of the remaining water like a dog. "Much fun!" it added with a laugh. Charmander grew even more annoyed.
"Gah! Stop it! It's cold!" she yelled, cowering from the water droplets being flung at her. Machop turned to look at her. It tilted its head and raised an eyebrow (or whatever they have resembling eyebrows).
"Orange lizard… is small," it stated, now that it was standing up fully. She grumbled a little but then urged it to look in the stream. Machop stared blankly before getting down on all fours, looking in the river.
It looked in it for a while before it smiled. "Hello," it happily greeted. Charmander looked at the Pokémon oddly and walked up to it.
"That's you, Machop," she simply said. Machop looked at her and shook its head.
"No, no, silly lizard. Me is me, and he is he!" Machop looked back into the stream, and saw a greyish face with three disc like thingies on the top of its head. It also saw a pair of dark red eyes in the reflection, filled with joy.
"He is he?" inquired Charmander. "You mean that you're a guy?" Machop nodded. "Why didn't you say so?" she then asked him angrily.
"Silly lizard ask me not," he replied, still looking at his reflection.
She clenched her paws, having had enough being called lizard. "I have a name you know!" she snarled. Machop smiled and stood up, looking at her with the fearless, innocent eyes. That almost made her even angrier, why couldn't the darn creature get scared?
"My name's Flash," she said, mumbling cuss words under her breath.
"Good name," replied Machop. He rubbed his chin. "Me not have name, me forget." He hung his head sadly, showing that expression for once. "Me think it was something with L… L..."
The Charmander looked at the Machop with a little pity and cautiously walked up to him to comfort him. "Don't be sad, I can come up with a new name for you."
Machop lit up again. "Will you?" Flash nodded eagerly.
"Uh-huh, what about… hmm… Loopy?" she suggested. Machop smiled, but was confused.
"What Loopy mean?"
Flash scratched her head with her small claws. "Well, it means happy, yet funny, I think."
"Loopy?" he said to himself slowly. "Loopy…" Suddenly he started laughing out loud as he quickly stepped up to Flash, catching her in a tight hug. He lifted her up and danced around with her, still laughing.
"Oof! Down, Loopy, DOWN!" she yelled while she was being squeezed by the stronger Machop.
He immediately let go, still smiling. "Apologise, me too strong sometimes," he said lowly, flexing his arms a little.
"My ribs," muttered Flash, regaining her breath. "No more hugging, Loopy."
"Will try to not, but will forget," he replied obediently. She chuckled, despite the ache in her lungs after the hug. But this moment wouldn't go peacefully on though.
"THERE SHE IS!" one Pokémon yelled from a distance. It seemed like an angry looking pinkish dog.
"AFTER THE THIEF!" another one added. That one was much larger than the other, and was brownish.
Flash looked at Loopy and then suddenly darted off. The two chasing Pokémon soon ran by him, ignoring him completely. When he looked as the chasing Pokémon ran after Flash, he had seen that the big brown one was carrying a small Pokémon in its pouch.
And there he sat, completely clueless of what to. Why did Flash run away? What was a thief? And why was he just standing there?
"LOOPY!" he heard Flash call. Not having anything to do, he ran to where he heard the voice.
To be continued…
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