PBFHDude
Fire Type Trainer
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- Neon Town (Kanto)
- Seen Mar 5, 2012
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Pokemon Nocturne
- Thread starter PBFHDude
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Sorry to be a pain but the text is tiny and quite annoying to read.
The maps are also very small, could do with them bigger.
From what I can see on the maps, they are much too empty, with no trees, rocks, bushes, paths or even flowers. They could do with ALL those things. Also the shore line on the second map is rather unnatural.
One other thing, Tall grass in towns is a big no-no!!
Check out the tutorial section, there is one on 'Natural' Mapping which might prove useful.
The maps are also very small, could do with them bigger.
From what I can see on the maps, they are much too empty, with no trees, rocks, bushes, paths or even flowers. They could do with ALL those things. Also the shore line on the second map is rather unnatural.
One other thing, Tall grass in towns is a big no-no!!
Check out the tutorial section, there is one on 'Natural' Mapping which might prove useful.
Master Terrador
Mostly Dead
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- Age 31
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- Seen Jan 17, 2017
Your towns are WAAAY too plain...Add some flowers and a Path...And can you give me a Magnifying Glass...Cause I need it to see the text...I'm dead serious...no joke...
He's right...Its very Unnatural...Read a mapping Tutorial...(I Recommend Neti's)
SwiftSign said:
He's right...Its very Unnatural...Read a mapping Tutorial...(I Recommend Neti's)
Conan Edogawa
One Truth Prevails
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- Massachusetts
- Seen Nov 29, 2015
The maps look to square like is a problem that hasn't been pointed out. I'm not a good mapper but from talking to myfavouriteax that is a no-no. The story is pretty good though.
DarthWaffles
IS A FIRIN' HIS LAZAR
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- Behind You.
- Seen Feb 16, 2011
Like the others have said, enlarge the font. Its terribly small. The story is rather strange, but I like it. The name team Heartless sounds a bit...tacky. I'd recommend a new name.
Yes, and your towns look very unnatural.
Yes, and your towns look very unnatural.