Pokemon Shadow Universe

Shadowed_Venasaur said:
Episode1
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SC Rules said:
2. This is a must. If you borrow any sprites, you must always give the creators credit We have had a series of sprite thefts in the SC forum and it would help that if you borrow any sprites, whether it's by a person or it's from a resource, you must always give credit. Those who do not; will be questioned and be told to so, if the person refuses to give credit, then they shall be given a warning. We do not tolerate Sprite thieves at any rate, people work hard on the sprites they make, they do not appreciate other people using their work without crediting them.
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The panels are too big.
Dont use chat speak- easily fixed! LEARN TO SPELL!
Whats with Brendan in Square 3?
The last 3 panels are CRAPPILY resized. If u resize stuff make it either 200x200 or 400x400
Give credit as read above.
You want a non cliched plot. Not the 'im going 2 get my pokmon 2dy! lololol!!!"
A lot fo improvement needed in those places. Good luck.
 
soory im new ya no and bout brendan his trying 2 camouflage
 
First off you need to give credit and maybe some info on the comic, secondly I dont like the way it says
w8 and 4 me. you shouldnt use numbers like that. also when gary goes into the building it looks really bad.
lastly you should have the speech bubbles in order on who talks. besides those i like this, the map is really
cool. you should continue this and change the things i listened. its alot better then alot of other comics on PC.

just one question, will this be generic?
 
That's pretty abd, please don't resize it, it makes it look ominously bad, and where did you get the city??
 
i got it from......i really forgot i think google or something.hey do u think its alright if i use fr and lf sprites?how do i resize (i use paint)
 
How come the bubbles are too big. Other than that (I don't really know the Comic rules because I will never do one) it would of been a pretty decent looking comic

:t003:Dark Venusaur
 
Man You really do need to learn how to spell...take 'your' first one about some guy with a gastly...that was really bad...plus, you was meant to ask Signomi to reopen that thread instead of Spamming...the 4th and onward panels are Badly resized, and Brendon? Even 3D People can Camoflage Better!

Sorry if this does sound alot to take in, but it is for your own good...
 
Ive Read Many Many Comics On Pc, There Are The Good Then The Bad And This Comic
Is Very Bad.

On The Minun (Minus) Side
1. The : And i Are Too Close Together In The Speech Bubbles So It Looks Wierd.
2. The Grammer Is Awful
3. The Panels Are Too Big
4. There Is No Story Line Or Bios In Your Post Which Would Be Helpful
5. The Sprites Your Useing Have No Credit And The One Your Editing Asks Specifically To Give Credit.
6. The Speech Bubbles Are To Big
7. The Brendan Sprite In Panel 3 Doesnt Even Look Camoflouged, It Looks Like An Accident
8. Your Speech Bubbles Arent In Order.

On The Pluse (Plus) Side
1. The Maps Are Awsomely Done!

Dont Stop The Comic Just Try To Redo Episode 1 With All The Feedback You Have Gotten. If You Need Help Pm Me.


EDIT- I Got More Complaints lol XD
1. In The 4th Panel It Says To Be Continued, Yet There Is 2 More Panels
2. The 1, 2, W8, 4 Is Really Bad Dont Use It.
3. If The Brendan Sprite Is Camoflauged He Shouldve Been In That Spot For Panels 1 And 2.
4.The Grammer Sounds Like They Never Went To School So Im Going To Correct It All (Obviouslly Bored)
Panel 1- Gary: I can't wait, Oak said he had a very important job for me!
Panel 2- Gary: I wonder why Oak does'nt ever come to my place?
Panel 4- (Speech Bubble On Top Remove To Be Continued Sign) Gary: Hi Oak, you called earlier?
Oak: Yes, I need your help. . .
Panel 5- Oak: In Viridian there is a Parcell I ordered, can you get it for me?
Gary: Ok, but how do you know that there wont be wild Pokemon every where?
Panel 6- (You Should Have Oak Answer Garys Question First) Oak: I almost forgot about that, hm. . . Here take one of these three Pokemon with you.
(Gary should at least be excited but what ever) Gary: Ok i pick. . .
(To Be Continued Sign Right There)
 
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Not to be mean, but Tbone2356, I think you mean doesn't? x)

See? - Panel 2- Gary: I wonder why Oak [(does'nt)] ever come to my place?

Sorry. But I'm a real Grammer Nazi. xD
 
Oh lord where to begin..
Ok for starters you provided no information abou the comic what so ever,
you just slapped down a link.
Its obvious that you cant handle your frame size (*points at the streched inages*) so make it smaller. Your grammar and spelling is apaluing, "u shud nevr use chat spek lik tis in ur comic ok m8?" it makes it look both scruffy and unproffessional. Your textboxes make me want to gouge my eyes out (figure of speach.) Try to use some proper text boxes WITHOUT STRECHING THEM!!!! Why is Brendan just standing in the building on panel 3? And why must you concist on STEALING SPRITES give credit! Last thing...
Never...
EVER...
Stretch frames.

Oh nad about that sprite BLEGH!!!
Its poorly recolored, no shading and you calim you made it when its a obvious recolor of the Red sprite.
 
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