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Exiled~Shadow

Once, JJMcay Now Exiled~Shadow
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    Ok, this is about my third idea for a fan game but i realy like this one so i am gonna stick with it.

    I have promiside a few people i would give a sneak peak today but if you realy want more i can show you more. I felt like doing this today cause its my birthday! I was going to release some of the story and some screenies but i havent got enough done for any screenies.

    So here we go:

    [FONT="]You are a 15 year old Boy resident to the small town of Maybok in the mystical land of Thoku, you return home from school exited because next week your teacher, Prof. Willow will be taking the class out on an excursion to catch there very first Pokémon. The door swings open, you see three strange men attacking your parents, your mother is unconscious and your father is struggling to battle the strange men off. The men seize you and demand your father hand over the amulet or he will never see his son again. Your father struggles to stand, and firmly states, "No!", Two of the men drag you off and throw you into a truck, your father calls out to you not to worry and he will come for you. One of the men stays behind and beats your father violently. Your family Eevee chases the truck, you tell it to leave but it still continues to peruse you and your kidnappers. Just before one of the men put a sack over your head you see your eevee shine with glitter and get somewhat larger, you are knocked unconscious bye some unpleasant smelling fumes. [/FONT]

    You awaken in a cell when a bucket of water is thrown over you. A man demands you provide him information of the amulet, you tell him you don't know what he is talking about, he tells you that you are no longer of use to them and summons fourth a scyther, he then puts the sack back on your head and bends you over. You hear a loud crash and what sounds like an epic battle in the background. You feel something chewing at the rope around your wrists. You take the sack of your head and see the scyther and kidnappers unconscious, and bye your side your eevee. Eevee pulls on your jeans and starts towards the cell gate, you tell you eevee it's locked but in its mouth are the keys. You unlock the door and exit the cell. You walk up several sets of stairs and find yourself at a trapdoor, you open the door only to find yourself out in an open field filled with wild Pokémon, you a young girl laugh and than a thump, you best friend, Flannery Moore tripped over you as you were trying to get up out of the hole. You explain to Flannery what has happened, She suggests that you go back to your house to see if your parents are okay. You and Flannery return to your house only to find the building completely abandoned. You grieve in sorrow, for a long time, Flannery hug's you and says everything will be okay, You swear that you will find the people who did this and walk upstairs into your bedroom to retrieve your things. Flannery tells you that maybe you should come and stay with her family for a few days so you can think all this through and not rush into something that might get you into even more trouble. You go upstairs and grab your bag and decide to accept Flannery's offer. Flannery lives in Skyleaf City witch lies past Lake ???, and you begin your adventure through route 501. Flannery had some months beforehand received an Empup (evolves into Infurgo) from her Grandfather as a birthday present so the objective of protection was no problem while passing by the pokemon filled lake and its surroundings. Once arrived at Skyleaf city you make your way to Flannery's Hosue where she explains everything to her grandfather and they happily agree to lat you stay in the guest room for as long as you need. Flannery takes you upstairs to the guest room and helps you unpack your things when you come across a strange note that reads:

    "Son, do not worry about me or you mother, she is safe with relatives but I cannot tell you who incase someone finds out that shouldn't know. I have arranged for you to stay with the professor but knowing you, by the time you are reading this you probably already made other arrangements. Go and see the Professor, I have entrusted her with all the information you will need to know. Untill we meet again son, goodbye, I love you."


    Feal free to critisize. I would appreciate it if someone could bold comment it.
     
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    Ok, this is about my third idea for a fan game but i realy like this one so i am gonna stick with it.

    I have promiside a few people i would give a sneak peak today but if you realy want more i can show you more. I felt like doing this today cause its my birthday! I was going to release some of the story and some screenies but i havent got enough done for any screenies.

    So here we go:

    [FONT=&quot]You are a 15 year old Boy resident to the small town of Maybok in the mystical land of Thoku, you return home from school exited because next week your teacher, Prof. Willow will be taking the class out on an excursion to catch there very first Pokémon. I don't really like this because it's the same story. Perhaps change it up. Try not to stick with the traditional story line, some like it, but most don't. The door swings open, you see three strange men attacking your parents, your mother is unconscious and your father is struggling to battle the strange men off. Interesting, but are you gonna have someone make a charset with someone that looks like they're beating someone and another that looks like he's getting hit, and another that looks unconsious? That seems like a lot of work... The men seize you and demand your father hand over the amulet or he will never see his son again. Your father struggles to stand, and firmly states, "No!" lol no offense, but what type of father would rather have his son taken away rather than give over an amulet? Two of the men drag you off and throw you into a truck, your father calls out to you not to worry and he will come for you. One of the men stays behind and beats your father violently. Your family Eevee chases the truck, you tell it to leave but it still continues to peruse you and your kidnappers. Just before one of the men put a sack over your head you see your eevee shine with glitter and get somewhat larger, you are knocked unconscious bye some unpleasant smelling fumes. [/FONT]

    I think it's a pretty interesting story, great job! leaves me wanting more!

    p.s. im new at bold commenting, but I think I did it right.

    Feal free to critisize. I would appreciate it if someone could bold comment it.
     
    Youve got the seeds for what could be a pretty good story here. How much of it do you have done already, or is it still very preliminary?
     
    "Youve got the seeds for what could be a pretty good story here. How much of it do you
    have done already, or is it still very preliminary?"

    I've know jj for a while and trust me, he's pretty dedicated to this game. With what he's told me, I think he's got a couple of maps done as well as some eventing.
    Can't wait for screenies jj!!

    lol i was too lazy to quote...
     
    Well it is being made with RMXP and i plan to use alot of anime style cut scenes to show more detailed things... And i have alot of the story done and once you play through the game more you will realize why your father did what he did... And also, it isnt the traditional way you obtain pokemon... it just seems like it at first.

    Ok, here is the next bit:

    You awaken in a cell when a bucket of water is thrown over you. A man demands you provide him information of the amulet, you tell him you don't know what he is talking about, he tells you that you are no longer of use to them and summons fourth a scyther, he then puts the sack back on your head and bends you over. You hear a loud crash and what sounds like an epic battle in the background. You feel something chewing at the rope around your wrists. You take the sack of your head and see the scyther and kidnappers unconscious, and bye your side your eevee. Eevee pulls on your jeans and starts towards the cell gate, you tell you eevee it's locked but in its mouth are the keys. You unlock the door and exit the cell. You walk up several sets of stairs and find yourself at a trapdoor, you open the door only to find yourself out in an open field filled with wild Pokémon, you a young girl laugh and than a thump, you best friend, Flannery Moore tripped over you as you were trying to get up out of the hole. You explain to Flannery what has happened, She suggests that you go back to your house to see if your parents are okay. You and Flannery return to your house only to find the building completely abandoned. You grieve in sorrow, for a long time, Flannery hug's you and says everything will be okay, You swear that you will find the people who did this and walk upstairs into your bedroom to retrieve your things. Flannery tells you that maybe you should come and stay with her family for a few days so you can think all this through and not rush into something that might get you into even more trouble. You go upstairs and grab your bag and decide to accept Flannery's offer. Flannery lives in Skyleaf City witch lies past Lake ???, and you begin your adventure through route 501. Flannery had some months beforehand received an Empup (evolves into Infurgo) from her Grandfather as a birthday present so the objective of protection was no problem while passing by the pokemon filled lake and its surroundings. Once arrived at Skyleaf city you make your way to Flannery's Hosue where she explains everything to her grandfather and they happily agree to lat you stay in the guest room for as long as you need. Flannery takes you upstairs to the guest room and helps you unpack your things when you come across a strange note that reads:

    "Son, do not worry about me or you mother, she is safe with relatives but I cannot tell you who incase someone finds out that shouldn't know. I have arranged for you to stay with the professor but knowing you, by the time you are reading this you probably already made other arrangements. Go and see the Professor, I have entrusted her with all the information you will need to know. Untill we meet again son, goodbye, I love you."

    Yes this is a bit bigger than the last
     
    Okay, but think about the amount of ow spriting for all these scenes!!
    also, can you move during these parts? Overall, great job! can't wait for some more!
     
    Nonono, REAL Cut scenes!! animations not little men walking around!!
     
    Nah there mainly going to be used at the start and end of the game...
     
    do you plan on revealing those now? or are they still in development?
    how are the maps/screenies comming?
    cant wait for more!! ^^
     
    Well, it is all in development but i just wanted to get others opinions on my story before i make it final...
     
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