Scott's Pokemon Journey

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    UPDATE: I've edited the first comic 'cause it was very shaby and basicaly pathetic. There's a little change in the storyline but apart from that-.


    Chapter 1: The Begining
    Episode 1: https://img236.imageshack.us/img236/1268/episode2ex4.png Going for a Walk
    Episode 2: https://img132.imageshack.us/img132/766/episode3xz2.png A Big Suprise
    Episode 3: https://img88.imageshack.us/img88/867/episode4qt0.png The Impossible Nightmare
    Episode 4: https://img233.imageshack.us/img233/6821/episdoe5yt5.png Welcome to Golhart
    Episode 5: https://img140.imageshack.us/img140/4632/episode6jt2.png My First Battle

    Chapter 2: https://img138.imageshack.us/img138/5866/episode7kp6.png The master of all Matter
    Episode 6: https://img80.imageshack.us/img80/3489/epsiode8ci7.png The Journey to Golhart
    Epsiode 7: https://img134.imageshack.us/img134/5238/epsidoe9tz4.png Lake Side Slumber
    Episode 8: https://img234.imageshack.us/img234/7915/episode10xb4.png The Proffesor's Invatation
    Episode 9: https://img230.imageshack.us/img230/3489/episode11nl1.png Mansion go Boom!
    Episode 10: https://img293.imageshack.us/img293/89/episode12mc2.png Team Galactic?!


    This is my first comic and It's a bit shabby but please say what you think.

    Credits:
    Thanks a bunch to Aoh Nay for the great tiles.
    Thanks to Paradox and Kike for some of the sprites. (not sure what forum they're on :/...)
     
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    Hokay, first off, I am going to say bad things, and it's going to help you because you're going to listen to me.

    First off, this is your first comic, correct, well, it's pretty much supposed to suck. I don't expect anything else. Now, first off, it's hard to read your comic because I'm constantly scrolling up and down to look at the panels and to read the script. Solution? Text Bubbles. Use them, want them, eat them.

    Second off, save your comics as a PNG file, not as a .bmp or a .jpeg. Those just look bad altogether.

    And use Fr/Lg sprites, they look better and fit better with most maps. Go to spriters-resource.com for sprites.

    And about your plot. I don't know if you think you're original, but you're not. It's been done a thousand times. You need something to make your comic unique. Think of something completely new and original. Otherwise your plot is boring and predictable.

    About the red lines and numbers. Make all your panels the same size, and line them up in rows.

    123
    456
    789

    Then you don't need those number and so you have more space. As for the red lines, although it takes more time, usually you just have one sprite per panel. Check out FuzzyMuzzy's Contest Challenge and you'll see what I mean. You move the sprite between panels as to show movement. Notice how in one panel they'll be in one place, but in the next they'll have moved and such. The only problem is that many people have walking scenes where all it is is walking, no dialog, and it's very boring.

    Use good grammar, real words, avoid chatspeak, and make it interesting.

    That should cover it all! Good luck and don't quit. We don't expect your first comic to be like FuzzyMuzzy's. Just keep at it and you'll progress, especially with the help of crit.
     
    These arn't very good.

    Gramatic mistakes, spelling mistakes, blurry comic etc.

    Keep it up though, we all have to start somewhere :)
     
    Just a little bit confusing lol :)
     
    Okay, it's a little confusing, it helps to explain it with dialog (Nice use of Bubbles!).

    For instance during the tree scene;

    Hmm.. Wait, that tree wasn't there-
    What the?!

    The new comics are still better though, especially the third. Just keep working at it!
     
    Nice comic. But try to make your speech bubbles pointy. By that I mean make them point to the person talking because I had a little trouble knowing who's talking.
     
    Try zooming in when your characters speak it creates more drama and makes the sprite comic in general look more professional. I suggest looking up the Pokemon X sprite comic as inspiration it was the original one and could provide a lot of lessons in what to do a and sometimes... what not to do.
     
    Well, it's alright. Not the best i've seen, but, like i said, it's alright. A couple pointers, though:
    1. PLEASE never ever mix your tilesets! I was reading the first couple, and the battle began in something out of Mystery Dungeon! AND Diamond and PEARL?! Don't mix, pick one and stick to it.
    2. Umm...some of the scenes are a tad cofusing...That one with the tree, how'd it get there?! He wakes up in two different places?! And how did he get through that cave after seeing the girl?!
    3. This is moving way to fast. Please, don't rush to appease the audience; you'll lose them if you do. Show the training, elaborate more on battles. Oh, and don't just randomly begin a plot, such as with the Master of All Matter chapter. You jumped too fast, pal.

    Well, i hope that helped. Good Luck!
     
    I know mixed tilesets :/ just thought it would look better. The bit where he went through the cave was not shown because... well I don't know. I should of turned that into a story. The master of all matter bit will explain itself in the next few episodes. Thanks for your comments (not) :I
     
    I hope you didn't mean "not" as in you didn't like criticsm, because that's all it was. Like i said, it's alright for a first try, i just want to see it improve along the way, is all. I'm sure i'm not alone. Just keep going and please don't bash my comments!
     
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