Simurgh

[Corvus of the Black Night]

Reposting this, it has a lot more work done and I'd rather not revive my old thread.

OKAY SO I LIED I'LL POST IT AS I GO ALONG

Simurgh

By Rachel Merryfield

Summary

Spoiler:

The year is 3567. The world is in a downward spiral - with humanity in tow. 800 years ago, a massive meteorite crashed into the Atlantic Ocean. Although the tsunamis that followed were devastating, it's what the blow did to the waters that caused this ruin.

The meteorite, upon crashing into the ocean, was large enough to penetrate its surface, releasing highly acidic chemicals. In addition, it crashed on a shelf underwater, colliding with the earth and releasing more acids from the rock.

The end result was devastating. Earth's waters were highly toxic, and the acidity was absorbed by the rain. In an international conference, the countries decided they had to merge and lift the continents.

The new countries - Samunia (Western Europe), Abelon (US + Mexico), Nordland (Canada), Kainudra (South America), Ethiopia (Africa), Arabia (Middle East), Cossonia (Eastern Europe to Urals), Wanuland (Asia), Nipon (Japan) and Australia (derp) - suffered severe population loses. The population eventually leveled out at a total of about 40 million worldwide, with much of this concentrated in Samunia, Abelon, Kainudra and Nipon.

Over the years, Samunia and Abelon would have constant wars between eachother. The stakes were high - if the continent was subject to too much destruction, it would fall into the abyss, as seen by the unfortunate example of Australia.

In this tight political climate, a young Samunian boy, Julian Freedman, embarks on a journey to follow his dream of finding a Simurgh, a member of a legendary race of humans that could transform into phoenixes, so that it can help purify the world and its people.

At this point, Julian is temporarily being fostered by a soldier named Simon, and is building a flying machine to reach Abelon.

Pages
These will be updated often. Red Pages are pages that are not available, Blue Pages are unfinished pages. Normal links are finished pages. Some pages may be in colour.

Cover
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012 (filler page)
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024 (filler page)
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COMPLETED ON MAY 22, 2011

FEEL FREE TO COMMENT, AND TO COMPLAIN THAT I'M NOT UPDATING ENOUGH. HEHEHE

 

[Trent_Jayir]

Wow... no comments....?
Either way :'>
This is looking great so far, you can see how you've improved even since you began.
This is a really interesting story. I would like to say though, it's very word-heavy in a lot of the panels, which is a shame... It would be really great if you could let the pictures tell the story more than the words. Yes, that means it's more drawing and more hard work (typing isn't quite so time-consuming) but It'll be a lot more enegetic and fun for the reader, for example, on page 16, you have one panel with a whole paragraph of text... It's such a shame becuaxse it's an interesting bit of the story! I would have loved to have seen a flash-back to match what's being said, like, him actually playing with the the toy planes and seeing his reaction as he realised what makes them work ... Things like that? Really push how far you can go, see if you can tell the story mostly in pictures rather than having words with a small illustration, I hope that makes sense, haha...

Besides the sometimes word-heavy sections, this is really good so far, I would love to see you do more! You have a really nice manga-y style developing too, so keep up the great stuff! It takes a lot of effort and dedication to get as far as you have, I'm impressed!

 

[비스트]

The cover is amazing ^^
but on page 16, the
person looks like his
forehead is really big
but keep up the good work!

 

[Corvus of the Black Night]

Wow... no comments....?
Either way :'>
This is looking great so far, you can see how you've improved even since you began.
This is a really interesting story. I would like to say though, it's very word-heavy in a lot of the panels, which is a shame... It would be really great if you could let the pictures tell the story more than the words. Yes, that means it's more drawing and more hard work (typing isn't quite so time-consuming) but It'll be a lot more enegetic and fun for the reader, for example, on page 16, you have one panel with a whole paragraph of text... It's such a shame becuaxse it's an interesting bit of the story! I would have loved to have seen a flash-back to match what's being said, like, him actually playing with the the toy planes and seeing his reaction as he realised what makes them work ... Things like that? Really push how far you can go, see if you can tell the story mostly in pictures rather than having words with a small illustration, I hope that makes sense, haha...

Besides the sometimes word-heavy sections, this is really good so far, I would love to see you do more! You have a really nice manga-y style developing too, so keep up the great stuff! It takes a lot of effort and dedication to get as far as you have, I'm impressed!

Wooow, thanks *-*

Yeah, I need to get the groundwork setup now, that's why there's so much text. But thanks for the comment, I'll keep it in mind. I'm working on page 017 now so I'll keep the updates coming!

I really like your idea with the flashback... but I have no idea how I'm going to fit that in. If it was how the page finished, it wouldn't be a big deal but yeah... ;-;

(yay, a response, unlike last time :DDD )

EDIT: Finished 017 is up.

 

[Corvus of the Black Night]

Big update - pages 018-024 are up.

 

[Corvus of the Black Night]

Crazy huge update. I finished part Eagle. Part Egret is next, another 48 page segment. Woot!