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[Kathryn.]

Well, as you can likely tell from the title, I am in need of some advice about writing a fanfic'.
I have around 95% of the story finalised in my head and the first third of the story written down. The only parts I have yet to finalise are minor inbetween parts, (I have all the major plot areas finalised.)

I'll post a basic outline of the start of the story, in hopes that you wonderful people will be able to give me some feedback, and potentialy point out some things I may want to avoid / adress.

I'll go ahead and spoiler the outline to save this post taking up an inapropiate amount of space for what is already no longer a quick thread;

Spoiler:

The basic premise is that this will be a OT story, set to begin in Johto. (don't worry, it won't be collect-eight-badges-and-go-boot-out-elite-4.)
The start of the story will detail an event which seriously reduces the number of trainers setting out on a journey. I won't include the reasoning in this intro', however the basic idea is that the age for starting a journey will be moved up to 17, rather than the previous 12. This will create a deficit where for 5 years, the only people setting out on a journey would be 17 or older, and anyone who is 17 or older, would already have had 5 years since they were able to set out; thus much less trainers.

In these 5 years, the johto region will become much more wild and a journey would be much harsher.

The story will follow Sam, who was 11 years old when this new law was passed, and as such, when she sets out on her journey at 17, is the first batch of soon-to-be trainers (apart from a very sparce few) for five years.

This story will reference many of the large scale events such as Team Rockets doings in Kanto, and Team Magma / Team Aqua's events. However, they will no longer the the comidic relief from the anime/games, they will be large scale ruthless crinimal organisations.
This isn't going to be a Mary-Sue, where she goes in and destroys an entire Mafia-esque organisation by her self, I aim to make this more of a struggle for survival, and a more realistic yet harsh take on the pokemon mythos.

So much for brief introduction...
Well anyway, I'd apriciate your opinions and advice.

- Kat

 

[Giratina ♀]

I don't quite get what you're asking us to do. You told us nothing of the plot, so I guess you just want critique on the set-up? If so, here's my thoughts: It's been done before. A lot. Plenty of people have come in promising a darker, more realistic look on the Pokémon world, and there's nothing particularly outstanding about this one except for the fact that Hoenn and Johto's events seem to be happening at the same time. Your story may be the best one in the world, but from here it just looks like another pitch at the Pokémon World as viewed through jade-tinted glasses. I can't give you any help, since you don't provide much to go off of except a bit of background information on the new law passed.